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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 20th, '06, 01:47

run to the ground , as loud as a pound , a should be crowned
fuck to the beat , kick with the feat , much to unique ,
grab the hoe , smack the door , hit the floor ,
im the grim reapear , cold hearted get a heater , bitch ass cheater,
you a gangsta , left hand wanksa , A grade pranksta ,
different style , fuck kenny , who killed kyle,
you had the big ass batman , the ultimate superman , im they top of the charts-man,
Gold digger , hold trigger , Cold hitter, bold bigger ,
style change , childs lame , mild game, wild came,
im the unsigned , im the un-wined , im the cunning-chim
name by bar , name of car , mercedes bar , confused like tar

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ok idk what the fuck that is im bored and just hitting somethign VERY different from me leave feedback :D
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Postby stevethetruth » Sep 20th, '06, 01:51

nice i like it all multies through out it was good but for some reason it's hard to picture you flowing that well on the mic (no offense at all)
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 20th, '06, 01:56

steverocks88 wrote:nice i like it all multies through out it was good but for some reason it's hard to picture you flowing that well on the mic (no offense at all)


for me itd be IMPOSIBLE for me to flow i just aint good enough yet but i just wanted to test my lyrics see how mad i could get them lol

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Postby ThomasAguanis » Sep 20th, '06, 01:57

:confusion:
some left me stumped meaning wise
but :thumbsup: on trying multis.
you seem to be getting the hang of it.

and is left hand wanksta subliminal to me? :angry:
ahah j/k man

great work though. keep it up
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 20th, '06, 01:59

ThomasAguanis wrote::confusion:
some left me stumped meaning wise
but :thumbsup: on trying multis.
you seem to be getting the hang of it.

and is left hand wanksta subliminal to me? :angry:
ahah j/k man

great work though. keep it up


you wank with you left hand :confusion:

thats what it means lol

and yeh most of the lines aldo left me like :confusion:

thx for the feed appreciated :smoking: :worship:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 21st, '06, 12:38

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Postby McBryde » Sep 26th, '06, 19:12

pritty good :smoking: for a change :))ko its good :whistle:
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