True love

by **stevethetruth** » Sep 25th, '06, 18:38

You ever get that feeling that you have true love
You found that one person you can truly love
That one person you

by **Restlesswon** » Sep 25th, '06, 18:48

sappenin man

pretty good so far man

by **stevethetruth** » Sep 25th, '06, 18:49

Restlesswon wrote:sappenin man

pretty good so far man

heeeyyyy
thanks for the feedback

how's everything going over there??

by **stevethetruth** » Sep 26th, '06, 01:21

by **stevethetruth** » Sep 26th, '06, 19:33

by **,-,'-{Bar}-',-,** » Sep 26th, '06, 19:45

Clarky wrote:I didn't like it, I'm not too keen on love songs, and this was a love song in it's simplest form. Try some more complex rhymes man.

lol i know youd say that

uhm really what clarky said to move up move off that stuff steve lol

by **,-,'-{Bar}-',-,** » Sep 26th, '06, 20:02

Clarky wrote:Yeah good point Bar - "Move up, Move off that stuff".

Over the past months I've been takin' tips from the best on this site, keeping at it and always tryin' new things. Now I'm miles better than I was but still with a long way to go. And the only way I'm gonna get any further is by learning from what people say and trying stuff out. Like yesterday MC Cubz was tellin' me about flow, and now, I know how to make my rhymes flow better.

But when bad feedback comes your way you never seem pick up the tips and experiment with different stuff. And I think you said you wanted to make it, and if so, you need to step your game up.

I wanna see you on a track with punchlines, methaphors, multi sylables and word play. Go on, try it, next thing you write make it as lyrical as possible. Then post here, get feedback, go back and work on what people told you could improve. And if they don't tell you how to improve it, ask them.

Unless you wanna keep writing love songs obviosley lol.

yup agree with you although my songs aint lyrically it , Yet , i go for flow right now i try simple metaphors and little multis untill i get confident with them i read thesaures and stuff to get into worplay and soon when i egt quality ill be hitting a song called "lyrical magician" and its gonni have all that stuff for 100 BARS thats gonni be my make or break song to see if i got what it takes but i aint recording this stuff till i get studio quality :sweating:

by **stevethetruth** » Sep 26th, '06, 20:04

you know i've tried to move off of love songs but whatever i write that's not in that topic sucks ass idk why but w/e i'll try to write something different but i can Guarantee that it will suck

and btw clarky as much as you criticize on my stuff i know you hate every word of it i mean as soon ias i saw that you posted i was like uh he hated it lol

and i know i'm not that good lyically but at least i'm trying to write stuff

by **,-,'-{Bar}-',-,** » Sep 26th, '06, 20:07

steverocks88 wrote:you know i've tried to move off of love songs but whatever i write that's not in that topic sucks ass idk why but w/e i'll try to write something different but i can Guarantee that it will suck

and btw clarky as much as you criticize on my stuff i know you hate every word of it i mean as soon ias i saw that you posted i was like uh he hated it lol

and i know i'm not that good lyically but at least i'm trying to write stuff

i think clarky is right just coz it reads the same as alot of your other songs :whistle:

its still good for that style but its keeping you in a certain level if you keep doing them

by **stevethetruth** » Sep 26th, '06, 20:10

Bar wrote:
steverocks88 wrote:you know i've tried to move off of love songs but whatever i write that's not in that topic sucks ass idk why but w/e i'll try to write something different but i can Guarantee that it will suck

and btw clarky as much as you criticize on my stuff i know you hate every word of it i mean as soon ias i saw that you posted i was like uh he hated it lol

and i know i'm not that good lyically but at least i'm trying to write stuff

i think clarky is right just coz it reads the same as alot of your other songs its still good for that style but its keeping you in a certain level if you keep doing them

dude i've tried to do differnet styles but you know i just suck at those other styles idk man i'm thinking of just making a mixtape for just my friends and people around the area and not on here cause it seems like no one is feeling the lyrics

by **,-,'-{Bar}-',-,** » Sep 26th, '06, 20:15

steverocks88 wrote:
Bar wrote:
steverocks88 wrote:you know i've tried to move off of love songs but whatever i write that's not in that topic sucks ass idk why but w/e i'll try to write something different but i can Guarantee that it will suck

and btw clarky as much as you criticize on my stuff i know you hate every word of it i mean as soon ias i saw that you posted i was like uh he hated it lol

and i know i'm not that good lyically but at least i'm trying to write stuff

i think clarky is right just coz it reads the same as alot of your other songs its still good for that style but its keeping you in a certain level if you keep doing them

dude i've tried to do differnet styles but you know i just suck at those other styles idk man i'm thinking of just making a mixtape for just my friends and people around the area and not on here cause it seems like no one is feeling the lyrics

its one song and im still feeling it its good for this style just saying that ya need to go into other styles , you got different styles , " whats up with that " is different and probly your best track , i aint saying these lyrics are bad im just saying a mixtape with 18 songs 16 of them love and its a RAP mixtape aint goni go down well with alot of people , i cant really talk i do lots of love raps myself

by **stevethetruth** » Sep 26th, '06, 20:19

Bar wrote:
steverocks88 wrote:
Bar wrote:
steverocks88 wrote:you know i've tried to move off of love songs but whatever i write that's not in that topic sucks ass idk why but w/e i'll try to write something different but i can Guarantee that it will suck

and btw clarky as much as you criticize on my stuff i know you hate every word of it i mean as soon ias i saw that you posted i was like uh he hated it lol

and i know i'm not that good lyically but at least i'm trying to write stuff

i think clarky is right just coz it reads the same as alot of your other songs its still good for that style but its keeping you in a certain level if you keep doing them

dude i've tried to do differnet styles but you know i just suck at those other styles idk man i'm thinking of just making a mixtape for just my friends and people around the area and not on here cause it seems like no one is feeling the lyrics

its one song and im still feeling it its good for this style just saying that ya need to go into other styles , you got different styles , " whats up with that " is different and probly your best track , i aint saying these lyrics are bad im just saying a mixtape with 18 songs 16 of them love and its a RAP mixtape aint goni go down well with alot of people , i cant really talk i do lots of love raps myself

what's up with that has the same concept though so it's basically a love song too idk man

i'll probably scrap my whole tape now and just release songs i already have recorded idk and btw i just do this as a hobby i'm not really trying to make it big or anything i make music for me and me only (kind of stole that line form eminem but w/e lol)

idk man

idk

by **,-,'-{Bar}-',-,** » Sep 26th, '06, 20:22

steverocks88 wrote:
Bar wrote:
steverocks88 wrote:
Bar wrote:
steverocks88 wrote:you know i've tried to move off of love songs but whatever i write that's not in that topic sucks ass idk why but w/e i'll try to write something different but i can Guarantee that it will suck

and btw clarky as much as you criticize on my stuff i know you hate every word of it i mean as soon ias i saw that you posted i was like uh he hated it lol

and i know i'm not that good lyically but at least i'm trying to write stuff

i think clarky is right just coz it reads the same as alot of your other songs its still good for that style but its keeping you in a certain level if you keep doing them

dude i've tried to do differnet styles but you know i just suck at those other styles idk man i'm thinking of just making a mixtape for just my friends and people around the area and not on here cause it seems like no one is feeling the lyrics

its one song and im still feeling it its good for this style just saying that ya need to go into other styles , you got different styles , " whats up with that " is different and probly your best track , i aint saying these lyrics are bad im just saying a mixtape with 18 songs 16 of them love and its a RAP mixtape aint goni go down well with alot of people , i cant really talk i do lots of love raps myself

what's up with that has the same concept though so it's basically a love song too idk man

i'll probably scrap my whole tape now and just release songs i already have recorded idk and btw i just do this as a hobby i'm not really trying to make it big or anything i make music for me and me only (kind of stole that line form eminem but w/e lol)

idk man

idk

your tape , your life , but one not great feedback and thats the reaction :confusion:

by **stevethetruth** » Sep 26th, '06, 20:22

idk man but thanks for trying to help idk what to do
i guess i'll try to get better even i doubt i will lol
(because i've been writing for like 6 months and i haven't improved an ounce)

by **stevethetruth** » Sep 26th, '06, 20:25

Bar wrote:your tape , your life , but one not great feedback and thats the reaction

first off it's not one it's all the bad feedback i've gotten idk
what i'm gonna do i'm kinda talking out of my ass at the moment trying to figure out what the hell to do with all these songs i wrote because like you said no one wants love song over love song and i hate to say it but there are probably 9 of em off the album right now
and if people don't want to hear it then what else am i to do right??

True love

True love

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