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50 bars for gf - Feeed please

Postby Inches » Oct 12th, '06, 03:45

basic, no multis, etc., she dosent really care lol
i was gonna give it to her for our 2 monther
its full of stuff we done and insiders
so you might not understand it all
604Pn0i if you read this dont let it leak man
P.S- for all you pervs.. theres nothing about me banging her in here
:tounge2:
and i didnt do it in red cause i ehard its harder to read so here ya go:


I didnt write this song, about sex and pleasure
cause on my heart scale, your loves too high to measure
so sometimes i cant help but be protective,
but look at my eyes, try to see through my perspective
when you talk to other guys i get sharp like machettes,
cause i wanna go steady whenever your feelin' ready
i want you to trust me, like i was your best friend,
no more than friends, lovers to the end
and i could keep going on line for line
cause me and you go back like the hands of time,
started socializing back in grade nine,
left my best friend and wanted to be mine,
but he got pissed, and i had to pay the fine,
dont kno what hell say, if he ever reads this rhyme
I thought we would last, when watching "When A Stranger Calls"
you had me under influences, like ounces of alcohol,
but you lost interest quick, a month after the flick
ignored me for a month, played me like a trick
started talking again, sometime in june,
cause my love never left, it stayed like the moon
and a week into summerbreak, i admitted my love,
wanted you to know you like an angel from above
didnt see you for a while, cause i was always workin'
started scaring myself, started thinking you was lurkin'
cause i want it to last, like a cinderella story,
and be together forever, not like the shit ya see on maury,
took you to gelato and could barely even treat ya,
your the most wwonderful girl, couldnt wait for mom to meet ya'
that was the day we met the "birthday" drunk
scared everyone away cause he acted liek a punk
you looked as beautiful as ever, on august eighteen
grey shirt, hair back, and your blue denim jeans
kilmer elementary is where it all went down,
heart beatin ferosiously, i sounded like a clown
and then i made you mine, felt like i got shot by cupid,
our second time around, so some people called me stupid
its better girl, cause together we are one,
cupid aimed his arrow at us and we stood we didnt run
and of course we cant forget when kailee wet her pants,
but i didnt even care, your prescence put me in a trance
when you said "sure", you put me in a shock
cat had my tounge, so i tried not to talk
so i went home, and had a beautiful sleep,
crazy with happiness, cause your love is mine to keep
and everyday, this song keeps getting bigger,
i wrote it from the heart, so dont call me a wigger
sometiems i worry that i aint your number one
worried that you go out, and have romantic flirty fun
which when i think about it, puts me in a panic,
makes my heart go cold, and sink like the titanic
and i wish i could stay up and write,
but its getting dark out, and i dont gotta light
to finish this section, im using the light of my cell
cause i wanna keep goin, like a battery from duracell
you can call this a poem, you can call this a song,
you can even call it crap, ill never call you wrong
worried myself, when you went to sarahs party,
didnt know if you could handle yourself, when your drinkin that bacardi
and its hard sometimes, but i know that i can trust you
and its knuckles in the face, for the guy who tries to thrust you
cause if your drugged, and they use you against your intentions
ill be there, to be your anti-trouble protection
kinda pissed me off when your said " im glad he aint here,
i can do what i want, but let it reach his ears"
when i first heard, i didnt really care,
thought it only happened once, and it would only be rare
then i told you today, "its ok, you had fun,"
wish i could pull you back like the barrell of a gun.
cause even to this hour, it fills me with anger,
breathin so heavy, lungs look like schwarzenager
and if i was angry, would you stay home and cry,
or would you go online, and hot on other guys
but to be honest, i wanna work it out
and be forever yours, i say this withougt a doubt
i wanna make you smile, when you readin this,
cause when im feelin ill, your loves my pharamicist
and i hope you dont read those lines, and think i wanna dump ya'
or think i wrote this song, just cause i wanna hump ya'
so no matter what you hear, let me voice be real
the one that you love, and determines how you feel
this is an insider here, hope it fills you with laughter
"Ryan i need a cord, for my wireless adapter"
and i wanna stay forever, as happy as hell,
and break the laws of phiysics, go higher than we fell
and on a cold day, let this song be your coat,
and try to remember in your head, all the lines that i wrote
maybe well get married have a girl or a boy,
spoil them like crazy with candy and toys
and when i lay six below, in my cold bed,
just calm down and breath, dont go to code red
just look at the children, hope they be my ressurection
and when you look in there eyes, try to see my reflection
God was in debate, with the devils election,
the good side won, so you got heavens protection
so what im trying to say, is that i will always be your slave,
and try my hardest to protect you, even from beyond the grave,
and we can make it, cause we got determination,
your always on my mind, cause your my inspiration,
and maybe you can love me, with a little luck
i wrote this song for you, my miss petraschuk <3
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Postby stevethetruth » Oct 12th, '06, 04:17

ummm


WOW

damn dude you know i would really love to hear an audio of that

well damn i'm just speechless
it was wicked good man

thanks for sharing
just damn it's wicked good i hope to write something like that in the future


good job man

:worship: :worship:


lol damn i'm def gonna be reading this over and over
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Postby rhiannon » Oct 12th, '06, 09:48

thats so sweet its really good too...i htink she'll be happy if u show her lmao....ur really good :flower:
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Postby Jay-19 » Oct 12th, '06, 14:09

That's really really really good!
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Postby Inches » Oct 12th, '06, 23:58

haha thanks all
our 2 month on the 18th im readin it to ther then
:happy:
mroe feed anyone?
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Postby Coccoa » Oct 13th, '06, 00:14

I feel like im having an erection.
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Postby Inches » Oct 13th, '06, 01:07

Coccoa wrote:I feel like im having an erection.


inm a good wayy?
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Postby Inches » Oct 13th, '06, 03:36

feeeed back peopleee
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Postby 604pn0i » Oct 13th, '06, 03:54

atta boy inches
2 months comin upp ;)
Disturbing Tha Peace.
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Postby Inches » Oct 13th, '06, 04:00

604pn0i wrote:atta boy inches
2 months comin upp ;)


Yeyeahhh man
better get us an anniversary present
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Postby 604pn0i » Oct 13th, '06, 04:07

haha
you wishh
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Postby Inches » Oct 13th, '06, 04:18

604pn0i wrote:haha
you wishh

haha
yeah i do

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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Oct 13th, '06, 08:36

good stuff man keep it up :smoking:
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Postby Inches » Oct 14th, '06, 18:54

Bar wrote:good stuff man keep it up :smoking:


thankss man
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Postby Inches » Oct 14th, '06, 19:39

more feeeed?
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