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Postby Infliction » Sep 29th, '06, 06:59

Yo, yall know who this one about chyee what now bitch



Lemme tell you bout a bitch I knew, who first time I met, I jus wanted to screw
But she sucked me in, manipulative bitch, I swear she the anti-christ
But I won't even give her that label, cuz she'd take pride in it, this girl aint stable
She piss-ugly men, donno what the fuck I was thinkin',
But every time I talked to her I would start sinkin'
She made me belive she was someone she wasn't yo, Stupid whore
I'd like the fuck her cousin though
Big ass titties on that bitch, Unlike her, fuckin' bra stuffin' piece of shit, you worthless, chick!
Grab a .45 put it to ya hairline and click!
Act like you put out, but you a fuckin' prude piece of shit
Ya pussy was hairy like a fuckin' kowala bear b,
It smelt like rotten cheese, mixed wit sweaty asshole, shitchu' ice cold
Aint it amazin' how I just roll wit the beat here
Kickin' the shit I picked up off the street, chyee
Imma make this shit clear, I got here by battlin' through and percevearin'
I had to endure tough shit, Lyin' in bed at night wit my eyes tearin'
Fearin' that the next day would be worse than that one, or the one before it
Before the sun sets I end up in even more shit
Take the little bit of good left in my life and try to restore it,
Cuz that shit, I adore it, but I digress, Back to the whore, shit
Now this next bit might astonish yall
It took my 9 times to demolish it all, and finish this bitch
6 month's of my life that I'll never get back, But it's aiight,
Cuz she won't get to touch my fat-ass-green-paper-stack
Goddamn I happy I left that bitch on her lonesome
Found me a good girl for awhile, one that was wholesome
But I'm single now, Fuck relationship's homie
Wit most of the girls out there, I'd rather be alone, findin' new pussy to bone
I only know a few girls who worth more, but they dont know
Those are the one's y'all gotta keep tight, and treat right
Most of them alone in sorrow, they deserve a good guy to take their heart, not just borrow
Fill that abyss deep in they soul, let them experience the bliss
..And know what its like to join two halves and make a whole
And Despite the way girl's act now, there gotta be some who might,show youthe proper affection
And us guys gotta have perception to find them, take it from Infliction...
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Postby Infliction » Sep 29th, '06, 17:49

I edited it so its in bars and its cleaned up, easy to read, sorry about that. FEed back please :)
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Postby polluted » Oct 2nd, '06, 03:43

Ya pussy was hairy like a fuckin' kowala bear b,
It smelt like rotten cheese, mixed wit sweaty asshole, shitchu' ice cold



lol....bravv did u actually stick ya prick up that shit??

lmao
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Postby Infliction » Oct 15th, '06, 06:05

nahhhh , but i fingerd the bitch :angry: 2 years back g, i was fuckin horny and i cant believe i did it, but wateva u kno, gotta forget about the past and move on wit the future! :D
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Postby 604pn0i » Oct 15th, '06, 06:57

young n dumb man
happens to erreyone :sweating:
Disturbing Tha Peace.
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Postby Infliction » Oct 19th, '06, 02:23

604pn0i wrote:young n dumb man
happens to erreyone :sweating:



haha, so true man
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Postby DC4952 » Oct 19th, '06, 04:39

yo wassup plaspp havent talked to you in awhile. Still makin that mixtape :whistle:
btw those are good lyrics, keep it up :flower:
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Postby Infliction » Oct 19th, '06, 19:16

still writing for the mixtape, i finally got a mic, but its on my cell fone :( so its not the greatest quality, but its actually pretty decent
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Postby DC4952 » Oct 22nd, '06, 04:41

plaspp wrote:still writing for the mixtape, i finally got a mic, but its on my cell fone :( so its not the greatest quality, but its actually pretty decent
ok wen ur ready ill send you the finished beat
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Postby Infliction » Oct 24th, '06, 06:37

Finished beat ? which one? Loyalty?
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Postby Rae » Oct 24th, '06, 15:18

i like it!!! its great! keep it up ... :D
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Postby Brihfl » Oct 27th, '06, 05:42

I like it
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