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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 2nd, '06, 00:32

dam ok ill try :sweating: lol :smoking:

time to keep the standard up , leave you peeing in a cup ,
im adjusting this back up ,ma rythms gonni keep getting better ,
if this was sex ad keep her getting wetter as a spread-her,
a spread her like butter rip her like a paper cutter ,
can you see the styles change , am from the british ilse derange ,
re-arange the rap game , bust yall with bubble wrap flame ,
ya'll claim to have skill but it became a ball game and you tame ,
the names bar ma home boy is 2 DeeP , with the crew sweep ,
we like a janitor we brush you steap , to reach here ya better leap ,
bet yall didnt think a could hit this sick , got to admit this trick ,
suddenly it take me time to write a rythm , but it tight this time ,
a never bite a line, rather make you bite a nine, this is quite a rythm,
a aint getting cocky just having fun , try mock me youll be having none,
like a pregnant nun, a get the job done, in one get ready the real bar-none has begun ,

agin need feed
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 2nd, '06, 10:00

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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 2nd, '06, 19:13

GIVE FEED
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Postby Kez » Nov 2nd, '06, 20:07

Good flow, good multies, overall just good. Can't find anything to criticise really.

Sorry if you see this as unhelpful :sweating:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 2nd, '06, 21:26

Kez wrote:Good flow, good multies, overall just good. Can't find anything to criticise really.

Sorry if you see this as unhelpful :sweating:


nah man this is what i want means i know im going in the right direction thanx man :sweating:
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Postby C-Game » Nov 2nd, '06, 21:45

Bar wrote:
Kez wrote:Good flow, good multies, overall just good. Can't find anything to criticise really.

Sorry if you see this as unhelpful :sweating:


nah man this is what i want means i know im going in the right direction thanx man :sweating:


yes u are
ur definitly gettin there
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 2nd, '06, 21:54

cgame wrote:
Bar wrote:
Kez wrote:Good flow, good multies, overall just good. Can't find anything to criticise really.

Sorry if you see this as unhelpful :sweating:


nah man this is what i want means i know im going in the right direction thanx man :sweating:


yes u are
ur definitly gettin there


thx man :worship:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 3rd, '06, 00:59

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give feed


if you would be so kind :sweating: :worship: ;) :angry: :'( :confusion: :smoking:
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