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Angry Verse ( FEEEEED)

Postby Inches » Nov 10th, '06, 04:44

(not my greatest but w.e.)
plan to make an audio!!

crash an' bash, turn your head into sediments,
Clock an Knock your towers, like i was the president
buckle my knuckle, turnin you entire face into rubble,
immature nature, you need two years to grow a stubble,
run to ya mom, hide in ya little cubhole,
fucked around with me, and cause fucking trouble!
(Go Ahead)
Make it Worse, put my name in a verse,
you better rehearse, your long trip in the hearse
ill have segments of your face, stickin to my shoelace,
cause a cold case, just because my weed laced,
fucka, keep ya belt up, all safe and done up,
before i put the gun up, and the other homies run up!
leave ya shit at home, if ya walk around alone,
you pushed buttons on me like a phone,
messed with mr.roan,get kicked to ya bone,
ill shave ya hair, so you can forget about a comb,
my knives cause bloodshed, so forget about cologne,
my finishing move, watch ya altitude
no homo or being rude, but ima strip ya nude,
so they laugh at ya body, when they bag it and tag it,
saw ya small penis and decided you a faggot!
before your casket, they saw your face and had to mask it,
bruises and gun wounds, send your parents to the basket!
none of it mattered, your rap game was pourus,
full of holes, yo homie take it to the chorus!
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Postby Inches » Nov 10th, '06, 04:56

feeeed please
tell me what ya think
should i make it an audio?
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Postby Inches » Nov 10th, '06, 05:56

inches2010 wrote:feeeed please
tell me what ya think
should i make it an audio?


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Re: Angry Verse ( FEEEEED)

Postby DC4952 » Nov 10th, '06, 06:53

inches2010 wrote:(not my greatest but w.e.)
plan to make an audio!!

crash an' bash, turn your head into sediments,
Clock an Knock your towers, like i was the president
buckle my knuckle, turnin you entire face into rubble,
immature nature, you need two years to grow a stubble,
run to ya mom, hide in ya little cubhole,
fucked around with me, and cause fucking trouble!
(Go Ahead)
Make it Worse, put my name in a verse,
you better rehearse, your long trip in the hearse
ill have segments of your face, stickin to my shoelace,
cause a cold case, just because my weed laced,
fucka, keep ya belt up, all safe and done up,
before i put the gun up, and the other homies run up!
leave ya shit at home, if ya walk around alone,
you pushed buttons on me like a phone,
messed with mr.roan,get kicked to ya bone,
ill shave ya hair, so you can forget about a comb,
my knives cause bloodshed, so forget about cologne,
my finishing move, watch ya altitude
no homo or being rude, but ima strip ya nude,
so they laugh at ya body, when they bag it and tag it,
saw ya small penis and decided you a faggot!
before your casket, they saw your face and had to mask it,
bruises and gun wounds, send your parents to the basket!
none of it mattered, your rap game was pourus,
full of holes, yo homie take it to the chorus!


the whole thing was awsome, nice flow, awsome lyrics, im lovin this, cant wait for an audio

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Postby ShadyGD26 » Nov 10th, '06, 06:54

tht was fuckin mean....tht would take me a while to respond to...an the way u transition at the end you should make it audio....it was pretty sick
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Postby Inches » Nov 10th, '06, 10:21

thanks all
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any more feed?
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Postby C-Game » Nov 10th, '06, 11:48

yea nice structure and flow
the rhymes blend well
i liked it

way to go UWC souiljah
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Postby Kez » Nov 10th, '06, 18:36

Awesome lyrics, flow, awesome everything. :worship:

If UWC ever did an angry track, you could use this as your verse.

Just a thought. :unsure:
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Postby Inches » Nov 10th, '06, 18:47

Kez wrote:Awesome lyrics, flow, awesome everything. :worship:

If UWC ever did an angry track, you could use this as your verse.

Just a thought. :unsure:


good thought

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Postby 2 DeeP » Nov 10th, '06, 18:52

i like it hope it wasnt me that made yoo angry :sweating: cant wait for the audio :worship:
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Postby Inches » Nov 10th, '06, 18:56

2 DeeP wrote:i like it hope it wasnt me that made yoo angry :sweating: cant wait for the audio :worship:


haha it wasnt dont worry bout it
thanks for feeed man
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 10th, '06, 19:19

awesome.....everything is killer keep it up :smoking:
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Postby Inches » Nov 11th, '06, 01:56

Bar wrote:awesome.....everything is killer keep it up :smoking:


thankss man
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Postby stevethetruth » Nov 12th, '06, 02:29

one word................. DAMN!!!!

:worship: :worship: :worship:

that was crazy i loved this verse man and that audio better come soon man

keep it up dude and once you get your setup going put me down for a collab if your up for it lol
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Postby Inches » Nov 12th, '06, 02:48

steverocks88 wrote:one word................. DAMN!!!!

:worship: :worship: :worship:

that was crazy i loved this verse man and that audio better come soon man

keep it up dude and once you get your setup going put me down for a collab if your up for it lol


i can record man
as long as your dont mind cleanin it up for me cause im new to all this stuff
lets collabb
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