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A Verse

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A Verse

Postby Kez » Nov 11th, '06, 22:10

Have you burning hotter than Michael Jackon's hair
Burning like your kids' asshole, thanks to him, but do you bastards care?
As long as he pays you you'll let him continue
And once he finished wit your kid, he'll try to get it on wit you!
I rap, so you like to make an example of me
I'm just special, much less standard then these
Who are normal, sorry, i'm just jealous, fuck hell it's
Nothing compared to this rap that gets you all cut, fellas!
UWC gonna get picked up for the Rap Olympics
Rap wit Bar, 2Deep, Cgame and rap wit Inches!
Go to Liquid, not that i do, but go and guzzle J20
The alcohol makes you struggle, makes you go!
On journeys you'd prefer not to, get the cops quick
I just looted a shop, bitch and pinched this lady's flopped tits!
In this drunk state of mind i did cocaine
Opened your head and flipped yo brain, but then you kicked low, PAIN!

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Liquid - Nightclub over here
J20 - Drink over here

Not serious, just wanted to submit something here, haven't for a while.
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Postby Kez » Nov 11th, '06, 23:25

Bump.

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Postby Enimee » Nov 11th, '06, 23:29

pretty hardcore man...sometimes its sounds a little off, i mean rhythm wise...maybe im just readin it wrong though
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Postby Kez » Nov 11th, '06, 23:34

In audio form it flows fine :unsure:

Must just be the translation from audio to text
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Postby Enimee » Nov 11th, '06, 23:35

see it must be how im readin it then, good job tho
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Postby Kez » Nov 12th, '06, 00:02

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Postby Inches » Nov 12th, '06, 00:44

its good man
but some parts did seem of,
depends how the beat is
hook up wiith the audio when you can

keep it up your improvingg
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 12th, '06, 11:39

inches2010 wrote:its good man
but some parts did seem of,
depends how the beat is
hook up wiith the audio when you can

keep it up your improvingg
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Postby C-Game » Nov 12th, '06, 16:59

well it flowed aight
except for this line

As long as he pays you you'll let him continue

to make it flow u gotta emphasize on YOU and let the flow halt a bit
but O/A it was kool
the endline multis was kool as well
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