one blood verse

[Ethos]

I got bored so i just decided to write one.
note: some things are bleeped cuz i dont wanna start shit with people. (yet)


I'm a protege of them dre, em, and game lyrics
when you hear them, you fear them, and i just learned from it/
you muthafuckers think that you're the really tough guys
but with the vocabulary ive learned, i wont let you fly by/
It took me one year to record the shit that i rhyme
soo yuo all need to realize I'm gonna struggle to shyne/
but through all this, I hope that you pussys dont get soft,
cuz then what are you gonna do when my album drops/
yup yup it's coming, I mad a true promise,
It should be dropping this year before christmas/
It's gonna be my best art project, The earliest production,
and this is just a taste of the lyrics you'll be bumping/
and if my shit flops no prob, i'll just take your shit,
put it on my shit, call it my shit, and then sell the shit/
Then you'll flip when you hear the shit,
To the point where you faggots will just wanna quit/
and that's no problem, just another -- artist gone,
cuz for sure i'm gonna make sure im #1/
Im ready for these beefs, i got a gift,
fuck with my best friend, then prepare to suck my dick/
cuz ima

that was fun to write. hopefully i gets to record it soon.
leave feed

[Rae]

hey thats pretty good ...

it was real hot at the beginning ... then u said

and if my shit flops no prob, i'll just take your shit,
put it on my shit, call it my shit, and then sell the shit/
Then you'll flip when you hear the shit,

that is the only part i didnt like ... (didnt really have any flow 2 me)

but tha rest is hot as hell!!!!



keep it up!

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

hey thats pretty good ...

it was real hot at the beginning ... then u said

and if my shit flops no prob, i'll just take your shit,
put it on my shit, call it my shit, and then sell the shit/
Then you'll flip when you hear the shit,

that is the only part i didnt like ... (didnt really have any flow 2 me)

but tha rest is hot as hell!!!!



keep it up!

those lings are sorta copying eminem

give me you demo ill tell you i dont like it 2 months later you hear your lyrics on my shit....

but still a hot drop good work

[Ethos]

hey thats pretty good ...

it was real hot at the beginning ... then u said

and if my shit flops no prob, i'll just take your shit,
put it on my shit, call it my shit, and then sell the shit/
Then you'll flip when you hear the shit,

that is the only part i didnt like ... (didnt really have any flow 2 me)

but tha rest is hot as hell!!!!



keep it up!

Thanx a lot i like that feed.

those lings are sorta copying eminem

give me you demo ill tell you i dont like it 2 months later you hear your lyrics on my shit....

but still a hot drop good work

yeah i know. i was listening to that song like an hour before i wrote this and it just stuck in my head. so i thought i could reword it you know. im just starting this rap thingy for real so i need a base to start on.

and thanx for the feed.
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[C-Game]

to start off man
excellent lyrics
good that u admit that thin abt wat bar said
most dont....

i liked the start

u went out and back a lil in the middle

the ending was ok

but my opinion is that u didnt capitalise on ur excellent start


and this is just a taste of the lyrics you'll be bumping/

up 2 dat line i liked it a lot

[Ethos]

to start off man
excellent lyrics
good that u admit that thin abt wat bar said
most dont....

i liked the start

u went out and back a lil in the middle

the ending was ok

but my opinion is that u didnt capitalise on ur excellent start


and this is just a taste of the lyrics you'll be bumping/

up 2 dat line i liked it a lot

hm.... that seems to be where everyone says i ended a good flow.
i need to work on it. i'll try and keep the same heat going on my next one.

[C-Game]

to start off man
excellent lyrics
good that u admit that thin abt wat bar said
most dont....

i liked the start

u went out and back a lil in the middle

the ending was ok

but my opinion is that u didnt capitalise on ur excellent start


and this is just a taste of the lyrics you'll be bumping/

up 2 dat line i liked it a lot

hm.... that seems to be where everyone says i ended a good flow.
i need to work on it. i'll try and keep the same heat going on my next one.

exactly man
waitin for ur next

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

hey thats pretty good ...

it was real hot at the beginning ... then u said

and if my shit flops no prob, i'll just take your shit,
put it on my shit, call it my shit, and then sell the shit/
Then you'll flip when you hear the shit,

that is the only part i didnt like ... (didnt really have any flow 2 me)

but tha rest is hot as hell!!!!



keep it up!

Thanx a lot i like that feed.

those lings are sorta copying eminem

give me you demo ill tell you i dont like it 2 months later you hear your lyrics on my shit....

but still a hot drop good work

yeah i know. i was listening to that song like an hour before i wrote this and it just stuck in my head. so i thought i could reword it you know. im just starting this rap thingy for real so i need a base to start on.

and thanx for the feed.

[/quote]

lol yeh that happens some rapper hits a sick ass line so you wanen try turn it lol keep it up

[Rae]

Rae wrote:
hey thats pretty good ...

it was real hot at the beginning ... then u said

Quote:
and if my shit flops no prob, i'll just take your shit,
put it on my shit, call it my shit, and then sell the shit/
Then you'll flip when you hear the shit,


that is the only part i didnt like ... (didnt really have any flow 2 me)

but tha rest is hot as hell!!!!



keep it up!


Thanx a lot i like that feed.

hey no prob. ... i will always give feed ... b/c when i post my own stuff i like 2 get feed back 2

[Coccoa]

I got bored so i just decided to write one.
note: some things are bleeped cuz i dont wanna start shit with people. (yet)


I'm a protege of them dre, em, and game lyrics
when you hear them, you fear them, and i just learned from it/
you muthafuckers think that you're the really tough guys
but with the vocabulary ive learned, i wont let you fly by/
It took me one year to record the shit that i rhyme
soo yuo all need to realize I'm gonna struggle to shyne/
but through all this, I hope that you pussys dont get soft,
cuz then what are you gonna do when my album drops/
yup yup it's coming, I mad a true promise,
It should be dropping this year before christmas/
It's gonna be my best art project, The earliest production,
and this is just a taste of the lyrics you'll be bumping/
and if my shit flops no prob, i'll just take your shit,
put it on my shit, call it my shit, and then sell the shit/
Then you'll flip when you hear the shit,
To the point where you faggots will just wanna quit/
and that's no problem, just another -- artist gone,
cuz for sure i'm gonna make sure im #1/
Im ready for these beefs, i got a gift,
fuck with my best friend, then prepare to suck my dick/
cuz ima

that was fun to write. hopefully i gets to record it soon.
leave feed

U just dissed urself, smh at u.

[Ethos]

I got bored so i just decided to write one.
note: some things are bleeped cuz i dont wanna start shit with people. (yet)


I'm a protege of them dre, em, and game lyrics
when you hear them, you fear them, and i just learned from it/
you muthafuckers think that you're the really tough guys
but with the vocabulary ive learned, i wont let you fly by/
It took me one year to record the shit that i rhyme
soo yuo all need to realize I'm gonna struggle to shyne/
but through all this, I hope that you pussys dont get soft,
cuz then what are you gonna do when my album drops/
yup yup it's coming, I mad a true promise,
It should be dropping this year before christmas/
It's gonna be my best art project, The earliest production,
and this is just a taste of the lyrics you'll be bumping/
and if my shit flops no prob, i'll just take your shit,
put it on my shit, call it my shit, and then sell the shit/
Then you'll flip when you hear the shit,
To the point where you faggots will just wanna quit/
and that's no problem, just another -- artist gone,
cuz for sure i'm gonna make sure im #1/
Im ready for these beefs, i got a gift,
fuck with my best friend, then prepare to suck my dick/
cuz ima

that was fun to write. hopefully i gets to record it soon.
leave feed

U just dissed urself, smh at u.

your point?

[Inches]

I got bored so i just decided to write one.
note: some things are bleeped cuz i dont wanna start shit with people. (yet)


I'm a protege of them dre, em, and game lyrics
when you hear them, you fear them, and i just learned from it/
you muthafuckers think that you're the really tough guys
but with the vocabulary ive learned, i wont let you fly by/
It took me one year to record the shit that i rhyme
soo yuo all need to realize I'm gonna struggle to shyne/
but through all this, I hope that you pussys dont get soft,
cuz then what are you gonna do when my album drops/
yup yup it's coming, I mad a true promise,
It should be dropping this year before christmas/
It's gonna be my best art project, The earliest production,
and this is just a taste of the lyrics you'll be bumping/
and if my shit flops no prob, i'll just take your shit,
put it on my shit, call it my shit, and then sell the shit/
Then you'll flip when you hear the shit,
To the point where you faggots will just wanna quit/
and that's no problem, just another -- artist gone,
cuz for sure i'm gonna make sure im #1/
Im ready for these beefs, i got a gift,
fuck with my best friend, then prepare to suck my dick/
cuz ima

that was fun to write. hopefully i gets to record it soon.
leave feed

U just dissed urself, smh at u.

your point?

it sucked n/o

[Coccoa]

I got bored so i just decided to write one.
note: some things are bleeped cuz i dont wanna start shit with people. (yet)


I'm a protege of them dre, em, and game lyrics
when you hear them, you fear them, and i just learned from it/
you muthafuckers think that you're the really tough guys
but with the vocabulary ive learned, i wont let you fly by/
It took me one year to record the shit that i rhyme
soo yuo all need to realize I'm gonna struggle to shyne/
but through all this, I hope that you pussys dont get soft,
cuz then what are you gonna do when my album drops/
yup yup it's coming, I mad a true promise,
It should be dropping this year before christmas/
It's gonna be my best art project, The earliest production,
and this is just a taste of the lyrics you'll be bumping/
and if my shit flops no prob, i'll just take your shit,
put it on my shit, call it my shit, and then sell the shit/
Then you'll flip when you hear the shit,
To the point where you faggots will just wanna quit/
and that's no problem, just another -- artist gone,
cuz for sure i'm gonna make sure im #1/
Im ready for these beefs, i got a gift,
fuck with my best friend, then prepare to suck my dick/
cuz ima

that was fun to write. hopefully i gets to record it soon.
leave feed

U just dissed urself, smh at u.

your point?

My point is u just dissed urself. Does it even need anymore?? You spit that u might flop on YOUR OWN SONG??? Telling them it took u a year to do what others can do in seconds, they gon mock u, not respect you. If you tell them that u struggle to shine, they gon actually believe you. Cuz they dont try at all, they shine naturally ("They" could be anyone btw) and that puts u below them immediately.

[Ethos]

Let me break this whole thing down so then people can understand

1)"I'm a protege of them dre, em, and game lyrics
when you hear them, you fear them, and i just learned from it"
I was saying that i started to learn how to write some rhymes through them.

2)"you muthafuckers think that you're the really tough guys
but with the vocabulary ive learned, i wont let you fly by"
People have been acting like there tough guys when there not at my school

3)"It took me one year to record the shit that i rhyme
soo you all need to realize I'm gonna struggle to shyne"
I was meaning i never had a mic to record what i had written down. so it's kinda hard to shyne when you cant record anything you write. i used a crappy camera mic for this.

4)"but through all this, I hope that you pussys dont get soft,
cuz then what are you gonna do when my album drops"
[b] My album is coming and i wanted to know what the fools at my school might do.

5)yup yup it's coming, I mad a true promise,
It should be dropping this year before christmas/
[b] I made a promise to my best friend to make a cd of me rapping

6)"It's gonna be my best art project, The earliest production,
and this is just a taste of the lyrics you'll be bumping"
exactly what it say

7)"and if my shit flops no prob, i'll just take your shit,
put it on my shit, call it my shit, and then sell the shit"
i just had that em line stuck in my head so i wanted to try it.

8)"Then you'll flip when you hear the shit,
To the point where you faggots will just wanna quit"
I was directing that at someone who thinks they can rap

9)"and that's no problem, just another tr artist gone,
cuz for sure i'm gonna make sure im #1"
You heard me. im gonna make sure im number 1 against one of the rappers on this site. name is confidential until Beef track

10)"Im ready for these beefs, i got a gift"
I got some rapping skills i just need to develop them

11)"fuck with my best friend, then prepare to suck my dick"
people have been fucking with her. and i dont like that


now that should help people understand.

[Coccoa]

Yeah i feel u now...dont expect many to read between the lines tho, 99% of the audience is straightforward donkeys, they can only see whats in front of em, nothing else.