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Postby Kez » Dec 2nd, '06, 18:09

No competition
No competition
No competition
No competition..

I don't make crap music but neither do i make good music
I make fucked music that you suck through shit
I put ears at risk with my fucked up songs
Stretch this to it's limits like a buckled up thong!
You wanna buy somethin good for a christmas gift?
Buy my new CD and give it to your uncle as a gift that's shit
Fuck what the law done said or what the courtroom read
If you whores gon rip my CD at least don't show me, dumb broads, shit!
Want me to shut my mouth now?
Till this smut dies down, wow, you've changed you can suck my wife's gown, NOW!
Oh that's right i don't have one, another lie that i have spun
Through these patheticly retarded idiotic rap songs!
I'm sorry i don't mean to offend you
It just gets sent through "accidentally" releasing wounds that i tend to
It's like lyrical scars on your body till you fear that your arms
Are being possessed by Satan for putting that beer in your heart!

[Chorus X2]
There aint no competition go and suck on a dick an'
If you don't wanna listen ima go on a mission
My flow starts the stitchin to the cut it makes when it blows on your vision
Till you walk in a ditch and now there aint no competition!

A big ol' dick in your clit or tits
Gonna rip your bitch a new one till she's slit or stretched!
Nah, i don't mean me i'm on about this crazy rapist
Who comes to your house each night to have his way with Kay's tits!
Seven odd pills put in your lemon soiled meal
That you shovel in your mouth again and again, unreal!
Duck tape gonna get you on the rubbed gate
Where men have come late into work covered in cum, wait..
What the fuck am i on? Maybe the kind of drug that i got
That makes me high enough to suck off my mom!
I'm obviously too much of a chav, so i should say "suck off my mam"
Right? After all, i'm a chav, wigga and fuckoff, right man?
Skive off school then run on the playground at night on a mule
Throw the bark around, break the wood and dive on the pool!
Tell the kids to stay in school and say it's cool
Then go to Hanley on the bus with a deal, tell them it's gay but rules!

[Chorus X2]
There aint no competition go and suck on a dick an'
If you don't wanna listen ima go on a mission
My flow starts the stitchin to the cut it makes when it blows on your vision
Till you walk in a ditch and now there aint no competition!

So tell me that you don't wish you could rap like this
Little crap white prick i am, i'm just Matt, i'm sick
I'm a twat i admit gonna get slapped by a brick
Like that time when i was a spack, cryin' dick!
I'm sorry i think we gettin confused
I said i'm amused, each fuckin' letter's abused!
I see you sittin at your computer monitor
It's seen so much porn, your mom knew when she got it ya!
This is like salmonella, makes no sense and astounds ya well then
Can i just state that Miss Brown is a felon?
If you believe that maybe i should put the pen down
Fuck this get round school and suck his left mound!
I'm no drug user i'm just so confused an'
Fuck 2 plus 2, i don't even know what 2 is!
Just get a sense of humour, go and rent a movie
And don't return it, throw it in the river Trent and shoot it!

[Chorus X2]
There aint no competition go and suck on a dick an'
If you don't wanna listen ima go on a mission
My flow starts the stitchin to the cut it makes when it blows on your vision
Till you walk in a ditch and now there aint no competition!
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Postby Rae » Dec 2nd, '06, 18:28

damn ... ur gettin alot betta!

keep it up!!!

i loved it!

u gonna make an audio?
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Postby Kez » Dec 2nd, '06, 18:35

Rae wrote:damn ... ur gettin alot betta!

keep it up!!!

i loved it!

u gonna make an audio?


Thanks

Yeah i'm looking for a beat now.
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Postby Rae » Dec 2nd, '06, 18:40

cool!

cant wait 2 hear it! :D
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Postby Kez » Dec 2nd, '06, 19:16

Right it's up
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Postby stevethetruth » Dec 2nd, '06, 20:48

not bad but hey dude try writing to a beat
cause if you just write and then look for a beat you'll never get extremly good at flowing ya know

form this point on just start writing to beats that's a tip
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Re: No Competition

Postby Inzanity » Dec 2nd, '06, 21:33

was this written to Eminem's "Who Knew" beat cause the lyrics look as if u took Eminem's song "Who Knew" and read through it and just replaced his words with ur word for example when u said

"I don't make crap music but neither do i make good music
I make fucked music that you suck through shit
I put ears at risk with my fucked up songs"

that sounds alot like when Eminem said

"I don't make black I don't make white music, I make fight music,
for high school kids, I put lives at risk when I drive like this"

I'm not trying to say u copied Eminem I'm just wodering if it was written to the same beat
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Postby TRshady » Dec 2nd, '06, 22:14

^ I agree, I too thought it was written too the Who Knew beat ...
try it with that Kez, I haven't told you personally yet Kez,
but I definetly think you got skills on the mic bro.
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Re: No Competition

Postby Kez » Dec 2nd, '06, 23:00

EmptyPromises wrote:was this written to Eminem's "Who Knew" beat cause the lyrics look as if u took Eminem's song "Who Knew" and read through it and just replaced his words with ur word for example when u said

"I don't make crap music but neither do i make good music
I make fucked music that you suck through shit
I put ears at risk with my fucked up songs"

that sounds alot like when Eminem said

"I don't make black I don't make white music, I make fight music,
for high school kids, I put lives at risk when I drive like this"

I'm not trying to say u copied Eminem I'm just wodering if it was written to the same beat


I didn't write the song to the beat, but i did notice that those lines were almost identical to Who Knew when i finished writin it.
I tried to change them but i thought it was good, and i didn't want to mess it up.
So yeah, i haven't "bitten" off Eminem, but those lines are similiar, but i'm sure they're the only ones (i hope)

And thanks TR :worship:
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Postby TRshady » Dec 2nd, '06, 23:03

I thought you intentionally used Eminems style for those lines, not to 'copy' but simply to pay tribute to and reference classic older lyrics. Nothing wrong in that, it certainly didn't seem a coincidence.
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Postby Kez » Dec 2nd, '06, 23:13

I don't know, i just put it in there thinking of the lyrics.

I'm not gonna lie and say "ohhh yeah that's what i did" to your comment about tributing Eminem or anything, i just put those lyrics in there, and no i didn't forget who they were by.

So, i don't really know. I guess really it was a clash between a tribute and a copy. :(
Maybe i shouldn't have :unsure:
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