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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Dec 14th, '06, 01:18

lyrical genuis a mean this abyss like a french kiss
or a swiss roll , well here's the whole soul i stole,
ducked the patrol im in control even though,
a feel a little bit guilty coz he cant kill me,
coz a spill the skill al over me, rep the uwc,
thank you, heres a debut give review fuck you,
you too need shampoo or a decent crew you realy do,
ok stop drop flop thats your whole career over before it near,
volunteer im a pioneer make you dissapear faster than dear,
there's no need to plead just bleed from the head as a smoke weed,
a got the speed a got the steed so lets proceed to succed,
you need advice, see your balls, see this vice, dont make me say it twice,
yeh run now, watch that ice, slip, oops a did warn you, its torn through,
wow, now im reborn, no im not just porn, so i mourn ,
what the fuck ma-on, stop before you lose all your credibility son,


feed :8)

dan ask em to explain the line i hardly understand them myself :laughing: j/p
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Dec 14th, '06, 13:47

bump

come on feed :D

i know some of its shit but theres got to be some ok lines :whistle:
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Postby C-Game » Dec 14th, '06, 19:16

nah it aint bad
i think its somethin u did quick

kool man
but not one of the best
well some lines u want eh

ok stop drop flop thats your whole career over before it near,
volunteer im a pioneer make you dissapear faster than dear,


thr were some lines that well ... didnt feel it
like the You need advice part
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Dec 14th, '06, 19:20

yeh it was quick lol

thx for the feed :8)
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Postby Jay-19 » Dec 14th, '06, 20:13

I liked it all.
I can imagine a rap of that shit! It would be funny as fuck! :D
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