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Postby Jay-19 » Dec 13th, '06, 19:58

Yo, this is something I wrote when I was a lil drunk...
But it wasn't this much when I was drunk, I wrote the last 2 verses yesterday... I wrote the first verse and the hook when drunk...

And I think it's quiet good now that I think about it... What you think?

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I'm dreaming of blow up all around the globe
And drop a hot record, do a thousand shows
I wanna be rich, and not be worried 'bout cash
Only want to succeed just to leave my past
Want people to say that they think I look familiar
And I want few to say "yo, man I really feel ya"
If one would said I'm good, I'd appriciate it
Cuz the only thing I want is to be appriciated
I am lookin' for the light, despite the mist
It's going to take hard work, so tighten my fist
But all I see is dark and my star won't spark
I walk thru the park, and think about the issues
Think about my brother, damn man I miss you
I'm dreaming about things, that I can't achieve
I never gonna get, all the things that I need
This lyrics' from the deepest parts of Jay19

I'm trying to look positive from every perspective
It's not easy when everything you do is not effective
I'm dreaming 'bout lots, I'm sharing my thoughts
When I'm turned off you should know that I fought

I'm dreaming about having both kids and a wife
I've had 2 gorgeous girlfriends, life tricked me twice
But there's nothing I can do 'bout that at this point
It is almost like God must be mad at this boy
But thank God for my mom, the greatest ever been
And thank God for my pops, the greatest ever been
But even if we're great, we will lose in the end
You'll lose your brother, or you'll lose your friend
Everybody struggles man and everybody cries
And you can tell if a person's built up on lies
That person is shy and never look into your eyes
Cuz he knows that we know that he's ashamed inside
I've never lived my life man, I live for the day
And I'm trying to avoid all the things that I hate
I'm servin' all you people, my thoughts on a plate
This song right here's from the deepest part of Jay

I'm trying to look positive from every perspective
It's not easy when everything you do is not effective
I'm dreaming 'bout lots, I'm sharing my thoughts
When I'm turned off you should know that I fought

I'm dreaming as you know, this is just a dream right?
Or should I say nightmare, that' what it seems like
Someone wake me up, I don't want my eyes closed
Remember first verse? I'm satisfied with 5 shows
Shit, I'm happy, just because I can make my music
The world will kick your ass just to see if the shoe fit

I'm trying to look positive from every perspective
It's not easy when everything you do is not effective
I'm dreaming 'bout lots, I'm sharing my thoughts
When I'm turned off you should know that I fought
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Postby C-Game » Dec 13th, '06, 21:14

wow long
ill copy it
read it
2mo ill post a good review aight

strucutre looks perfect
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Postby Jay-19 » Dec 13th, '06, 23:34

Thank you Clarky! :8)
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Postby Jay-19 » Dec 14th, '06, 15:50

Thanks Killa, I appriciate it!
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Postby C-Game » Dec 14th, '06, 17:59

hey liked ur stuff
deep meanin
its kool u maintained da story through out
good structure and flow
im feelin it
and btw wat happend to ur bro?
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Postby Jay-19 » Dec 14th, '06, 20:08

cgame wrote:hey liked ur stuff
deep meanin
its kool u maintained da story through out
good structure and flow
im feelin it
and btw wat happend to ur bro?


My brother comitted suicide last year in November. :(
He was supposed to turn 18 in 9 days :'(

I miss him.
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Postby C-Game » Dec 14th, '06, 20:15

KillahGoat wrote:
cgame wrote:hey liked ur stuff
deep meanin
its kool u maintained da story through out
good structure and flow
im feelin it
and btw wat happend to ur bro?


My brother comitted suicide last year in November. :(
He was supposed to turn 18 in 9 days :'(

I miss him.


oh sorry bro
may he RIP
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Postby Jay-19 » Dec 14th, '06, 23:24

Thanks cgame.
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