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[Inzanity]

Me (verse 1)
The rain hits the window, the tears hit the floor
The pain that's within yo, is too feirce to be cured
Anger and rage, hate that's engraved
From a painful past, there's no tellin' how long this pain will last
Cuz' when ur souls been broken, u turn cold and hopeless
It's hard to forget a broken past, when ur souls got an open gash
Imagine a drunken father who tries to touch his daughter
An alcoholic uncle who melested his necies and nephews
Weeping is all that's left to do from the pain that they left in u
7 years old and u got an uncle melesting u
So u get confused, from the smell of incest and boose
By the age of 14 u starting rejecting dude's,
cuz' u think all men are the same all drunken child melesters,
so u figure dating girls is the only way to put an end to the pain
And the only way to vent out the rage, is putting a pen to a page
And writing ur feelings on paper, instead of leaving um' sealed and caged up
cuz' they beat ya and raped ya
and murdered ur soul left u hurt and alone
u may feel like ur the only one who's endured such pain
but other children in the family also endured the same
I was melested by the same uncle,
and my father tried to touch me to, but he wasn't drunk tho
I know ur souls bleeding, cuz' mine's bleeding too,
I know ur souls screaming, cuz' mine's screaming too
but don't give up cuz' I believe in you and God will see u through
and I hope this song speaks to u cuz'

(Chrous)
Word's can sometime's speak to a person's soul
When their heart is cold, and they feel lost and alone
So this is dedicated to the forgotten soul's
(repeat 1x)

Mitch (Verse 2)
this is the truth that be comin from this booth
I'ma bout to tell u wat goes on under my roof
it's something deep as a well is, how can I tell this
but right here is where Hell is, when I was young
I felt everybody was against me, and I felt alone
that no1 will ever defend me, my soul was on empty
felt that everybody did anything to end me
I did wat I do not knowing wat the consequence wud send me
I felt crushed something like I was an abandon soul
life sucked I wounder how worse can it go
I felt worthless nothing that I can control
I felt caged in my own body I felt like an animal
I also felt shitty like a diseased child that has no antidote
I felt hatred would build up and brake me open like a cantilope
there was no hope I was going down like a skier on a slope
it was like Satan was in me and I needed an exorcism
sumthin I wish I never had ta mention I was basicaly in prison
the vision of gettin' out of this was a long shot just impossible
I was just going looney felt like I needed to be put in a hospital
then I saw the light I moved toward it it gave me some encourgement
was God givin me a hand? I wasn't sure of it
I was lured to it, pure music rung inside my ears
I was strengthened, stamina lengthened, happily I cried tears
I felt nuttin could stop me no matter how fierce
my soul was cold now it's warm as a spring day is
how can I say this but since then I felt the greatest
learn from this don't turn from this just don't stop trying
look at the sucker in the eyes let him know the fire in u ain't dying
I ain't lying when I say life's great but only if u make it be
once I realized it I felt strong as an ox and no1 was braking me
don't mistakinly ,think it be easy cuz' it won't be
put ya head up quitter is wat u don't want to be
don't get locked up like Akon and just stay strong
and don't be an abandon soul but just let the good times play on


(Chours 2x)

[stevethetruth]

not bad man your verse could use some tweaking but overall it's looks pretty good

nice and deep

[Inzanity]

Propz man *bump* anybody else??

[Inzanity]

dope i like it ...obv cos theres no audio etc i can only imagine what it sounds like .....i reckon the hook may sound a lil off (mainly due to most hooks having a even amount of bars ...idk i just see when it repeats it not sounding and flowing aswell as it may .....otherwise its great

Thanx for the reply. It'll work fine to the beat we're gonna do it to. It's the beat to a song called "Big City Life."

[Inzanity]

*Bump*