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Some deep shit ( Am I in love? ) REAL DEEP :(

Postby C-Game » Dec 14th, '06, 18:02

Hey this is some real shit
wat im goin through
one of the most deepest shit iv ever wrote..
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loves blindness reminds-us define-up the effect of affection personified
each person-we-find deformed-or-fine finds endearment,y am i cursed-on-with-lies
i burst-on-just-cry my pillow feel-so drenched no strength im fading-i-snap
get crazy-and-rap god placedme-entrapped dating four isnt great-its-so-wack
im just a sailor-in-sea as i pray-i-wanna-reach the visible unreachable oasis
of love and how come i see lovers endeavour forever in it and i aint being poetic
am i bein jelous or am i just lyin am i bein a player or am i denyin
im relyin on these girls for fun five years from now whos gonna end up cryin
is it ma girls convexity leads to da complexity of ma minds perplexity
worlds put a hex-on-me with a cessation on love as ma heart feels cremation
i thought how lucky to be-me-im-blesed,letters of ma gals R-T-D-and-S
i thought it was love but how come still my heart-beats-weak-im-stressed
my accomplishments are many i'll list some ive been 6 years in rap and countin
all island rap champs an album, videos, wen onstage got a fan base whos shoutin
hailztorm, cgame, ma studies are awesome, money is kool, parents are da best
wen da sun goes down im alone starin away why do i get this pain in ma chest?
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Dec 14th, '06, 18:05

great rythms and deep shit excellent work :D

i need to talk to you on msn aswell :8)
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Postby C-Game » Dec 15th, '06, 22:32

feed????????????
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Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Dec 16th, '06, 03:58

Definitely some deep shit man. I don't really got much to say other then that...its sick though. If you record it hit me up, I'd love to listen to the actual song instead of reading it y'know?
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Re: Some deep shit ( Am I in love? ) REAL DEEP :(

Postby Inzanity » Dec 16th, '06, 12:58

amazing really deep :worship: just wow genius I love the lyrics in this honestly
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Postby C-Game » Dec 16th, '06, 20:06

thanks empty and weirdo for the feed
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Postby C-Game » Dec 17th, '06, 08:56

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Postby Crossova16 » Dec 18th, '06, 03:02

i think that was amazing...keep up the good work...

and keep postin ur shit broo

real deep

check game..im goin throguh somethin similar

ima pimp, ima playa and homy i think its time to end it/
i regret it/, but even if i stop, i will never forget it/
i think i may be in love with the chick i cheated on/
but as my hearts keeps beatin on/
and my mind keeps eatin on/
i did something stupid and my lungs dont deserve to be breathin on/
i can't live with the fact its the same stupid feeling i felt/
when i cursed my moms out my heart is startin to melt/
but my minds biult strong enough to eat off this guilt/
everything else is fine, my studies is fine/
and ive got alot of friends of mine/
my parents treaten me good, this is like the worst time/
im cryin so much i dont even have enough energy to finish this rhyme/
theres nothin left homy i needa rest/
the twist bout it is thats the days go smooth i gets a's on my test/
but when the sun goes down im alone starin away with a strong pain in ma chest/
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Postby 4D » Dec 18th, '06, 17:51

Awesome dude, lyrically it`s real tight, lots of multies, great flow. Content is deep, and you really get that emotion across with come complex rhymes, without resorting to simple, easy to do shit. Very good indeed, look forward to reading your next drop man, definitely!

Final verdict: Hot!

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im just a sailor-in-sea as i pray-i-wanna-reach the visible unreachable oasis


Dunno why, but, I really like that line, very poetic!
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Postby C-Game » Dec 18th, '06, 17:55

FORDIE wrote:Awesome dude, lyrically it`s real tight, lots of multies, great flow. Content is deep, and you really get that emotion across with come complex rhymes, without resorting to simple, easy to do shit. Very good indeed, look forward to reading your next drop man, definitely!

Final verdict: Hot!

FAvourite line:

im just a sailor-in-sea as i pray-i-wanna-reach the visible unreachable oasis


Dunno why, but, I really like that line, very poetic!


thnkx a lot man
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Postby ShadyAngel » Dec 24th, '06, 16:36

thats fking good hun
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Emily RIP. x

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things without all remedy should be without regard, whats done is done. - william shakespear (Macbeth)
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Postby C-Game » Dec 24th, '06, 16:43

ShadyAngel wrote:thats fking good hun


thnks angel
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