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Ring a Round the Rosey

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Ring a Round the Rosey

Postby JMG » Dec 18th, '06, 05:39

verse 1

out with the old in with the new,
all that other shit is in my rear view,
im swithing the gear 2,
tryin to make the worst days into the best,
all the shit i went though i confess,
i continued to be depressed ,
every day it seems to be my dreams are fadin away,
guess im not cut out for life,
there tryin take me out but i will not go down without a fight,
doubt my mite, but dont go in the dark without a light

chorus

ring a round the rosey lisin closely u muther fuckers dont no me

pocket full of posey ur talkin shit stop it and blow me

ashes ashes we all fall down nothin to do its gods call now
(repeat)

verse 2

im starting to be a true thug,
drinkin doin drugs,
comitting crimes spitting rhymes,
still shook up dont no where to go hopin things will look up,
but no what do i do what goal must i try to go for,
i cant put nothin into it cuz my soul is so sore,
my momentum is no more,
and the 4 g'z in court fees are sending me so poor,
i wish i knew what to do next,
seems like ive been hit with a vodoo hex,
but i gotta overcome,
its gettin late and this weight has got my shoulders num,
could end it now if load this gun

chorus

verse 3

i can be crazy so dont tempt me son or test my redemption,
im hopin this life is only a test run,
so i can get another chance stick to my stance on my next run,
and every minute i reach my limit,
life is gettin colder i can see my own breath takin shit is over i need my own respect,
im gonna take the throne and call seat check ,
leave it alone its me next ,
cuz i master mind these lines with faster time i breath rhymes

chorus
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Dec 18th, '06, 10:25

ring a around the rosie :laughing:

who the fuck are you tony yayo :laughing:
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Postby JMG » Dec 18th, '06, 17:31

no im not tony yayo but ur from scotland so a man that wears a skirt has no room at all to talk shit to americans
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Postby Inzanity » Dec 18th, '06, 18:53

Jmgeezy wrote:no im not tony yayo but ur from scotland so a man that wears a skirt has no room at all to talk shit to americans


:laughing: sorry I don't mean to laugh Bar but he got u good wit that one. Anyway that was actually a pretty good song. Although the best part was the chorus the verse's were pretty good. Dope shit man. r u gonna do an audio I hope so I'd like to hear this put to a beat it's be pretty sick.
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Postby JMG » Dec 18th, '06, 18:54

thank but yeah i want to i need to get a mic and shit though my own one dont work n e more im bout to get a new one though
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Dec 18th, '06, 19:00

Jmgeezy wrote:no im not tony yayo but ur from scotland so a man that wears a skirt has no room at all to talk shit to americans


i wear skirts , dam you original , ill show you pics then we'll see if i wear skirts...

http://www.profileheaven.com/Bar2oo6

look i dont wear skirts


now thats that sorted,

adivce you aint goni last long here if you gonni act as if you are a god like race coz you an "american"

lastly

work on your structure its all over the place , and your rythms are good if you have just started , flow needs work aswell...keep practicing
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Postby JMG » Dec 18th, '06, 19:37

stop tryin to give me advice muther fucker id take what u just said if u were somebody but ur some fuckin scotishmen so fuck off and dont try to tell me what i need to work on cuz i do what i do for me no one else and dont show me pics of u im not gonna look at that shit i dont give a fuck what u look like
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Postby stevethetruth » Dec 18th, '06, 19:38

Jmgeezy wrote:stop tryin to give me advice muther fucker id take what u just said if u were somebody but ur some fuckin scotishmen so fuck off and dont try to tell me what i need to work on cuz i do what i do for me no one else

it's called constuctive critiztism
lmao!! if you didnt want advice then why in the hell did you post it??? :whistle:
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Postby JMG » Dec 18th, '06, 19:40

cuz i want my shit out there say if its good or bad dont tell me what i need to work on cuz my shit is pefect the way it is
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Dec 18th, '06, 19:40

Jmgeezy wrote:stop tryin to give me advice muther fucker id take what u just said if u were somebody but ur some fuckin scotishmen so fuck off and dont try to tell me what i need to work on cuz i do what i do for me no one else and dont show me pics of u im not gonna look at that shit i dont give a fuck what u look like


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Postby stevethetruth » Dec 18th, '06, 19:42

Jmgeezy wrote:cuz i want my shit out there say if its good or bad dont tell me what i need to work on cuz my shit is pefect the way it is


it may be perfect in your eyes right now but everyone has to improve somewhere hell even em has to improve on some of his songs

and plus it's better to tell what you could improve on to HELP YOU THAT'S THE WHOLE POINT in posting shit on here duh
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Postby JMG » Dec 18th, '06, 19:44

well thats one thing but that bitch is sayin i just started when i didnt
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Postby stevethetruth » Dec 18th, '06, 19:45

Jmgeezy wrote:well thats one thing but that bitch is sayin i just started when i didnt


he was joking lol
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Postby JMG » Dec 18th, '06, 19:47

whatever i dont got time to argue on the internet im the best case close
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Postby stevethetruth » Dec 18th, '06, 19:47

Jmgeezy wrote:whatever i dont got time to argue on the internet im the best case close





hahaahhahhahahaahhahahahah










you wish
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