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Dont Call Me Baby

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Dont Call Me Baby

Postby Enimee » Dec 29th, '06, 03:30

Chorus.
Dont call me baby, unless you really mean it
Dont call me baby, unless you wnna be it
Dont call me baby, unless i can be it
So yeah im not your fuckin baby.
Re:2x

verse1
You say you love me and you wnna be ma girl, but i dont see it
if it were true we could be and id give you da world, but it couldnt be shit
i kno you say that you would neva lie, but you in love wit anotha guy
is it me or is that some triflin shit why, would you do that stiflin shit i might die
cause i love you so much it hurts, and its like we jus met and whats worse
is i cant see you so i know your justa flirt, but i still want this ta work
but i know it cant cause your just that way, you stole my heart and now its to late
for me to take bake my feelins ok?, so why donchu tell me whats really good "babe"

chrous x2

verse2
so now maybe you get it dont ask again, understand that i love you and
we could be together but theres another man, that and you dont blend
into my picture the one that i rendered, for me and you afta december
jus no ill always remember, you "like me alot" but my hearts in cinders
cause what you put me through, has me questionin life and born anew
at the same time you, make me wnna die inside a cold brew
so look im puttin it out your ma love wit out a dout, no ones above
but you make me wnna shout and pout, cause of this forbiden love

chorus x4
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Postby stevethetruth » Dec 29th, '06, 03:38

not bad flow sounds iffy but that might just be me lol

over all keep it up man :happy:

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read it a second time very deep
idk bout you but i love writing songs bout the shit if you didin't notice lmao

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Postby MoBrat » Dec 29th, '06, 03:39

its deep and its got great flow it basically took the words outta my mouth mad props :worship: :worship:
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