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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 3rd, '07, 05:21

i got a lust for fame, bright lights in ma name,
my tight rythms how i claim, never two times the same,
lets times what i claim but am shit at mathmatics
and a shit on you fanatics a make this shit go dramatic
touch me am static trust me am at it thats it ave had it
feel the fire a spit now you inspire by it a never tire of it
im sorta like a train on its track so tame, then a blew ma brain
i never been the same its like a sniffed cocaine swift ,
yup that was twenty grain now i aint got a penny to name
so im oficially cheap and artaficially deep
infact goodbye im goini to weep


LEAVE FEED

since i seen more action in a cemetery


its all practice the end bit is just for fun :8)
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Postby C-Game » Jan 3rd, '07, 08:23

nice UWC brother
da mathamatics line was kool
i liked dat part
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 3rd, '07, 15:08

cgame wrote:nice UWC brother
da mathamatics line was kool
i liked dat part


thx man :8)
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 4th, '07, 00:53

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Postby Inches » Jan 4th, '07, 00:56

good flow man good lyrics and it was short so it was easy to read
try to increase your vocab though and use bigger words thetd be dope

and i know what you mean about how slow people move around here

nobody seeems to ever comment

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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 4th, '07, 01:30

Inches wrote:good flow man good lyrics and it was short so it was easy to read
try to increase your vocab though and use bigger words thetd be dope

and i know what you mean about how slow people move around here

nobody seeems to ever comment

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lol yeh they all old lazy fuckers lol


thx man ill try a rythm with big words lol...though i dont know many lol
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Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 4th, '07, 01:44

Nice Flow and tha Last Line Mathmatics was Okay/
when tha Dice Roll and I'm At Rymes I'm a Maverick on [Dis play]//
my Advice Go, it's That Time my Madness tha Fastest it Stays This Way//

Keep with it yor flow wasn't movin slow
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 4th, '07, 01:47

Rain Matrix wrote:Nice Flow and tha Last Line Mathmatics was Okay/
when tha Dice Roll and I'm At Rymes I'm a Maverick on [Dis play]//
my Advice Go, it's That Time my Madness tha Fastest it Stays This Way//

Keep with it yor flow wasn't movin slow


lol thx man :worship:
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