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Postby Rae » Jan 7th, '07, 02:42

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Postby stevethetruth » Jan 7th, '07, 02:45

got the messege right across but the structure and flow could use some work ;)

good job for letting your emotions out :flower:
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Postby Rae » Jan 7th, '07, 02:47

steverocks88 wrote:got the messege right across but the structure and flow could use some work ;)

good job for letting your emotions out :flower:



lmao thanx ...i was writing it to a beat ...

but i dunno what it was called b/c it was on tha radio lmao

thanx tho :D
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Postby Hoopz » Jan 7th, '07, 02:51

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Postby TiFFany08 » Jan 7th, '07, 03:30

i think its really good how it is
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Postby Kez » Jan 7th, '07, 03:36

Lyric-wise it's average, but it's deep and gets the message across well.
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Postby Rae » Jan 7th, '07, 03:40

lol thanx

i know i used 1st grade rhymes ...

but i couldnt really get into writing mood, ya know?


but thanx every1 :D
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Postby Enimee » Jan 7th, '07, 04:12

good work...as always you never cease to amaze me keep it up your getting much better
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Postby Rae » Jan 7th, '07, 04:20

Enimee wrote:good work...as always you never cease to amaze me keep it up your getting much better



no ur suppost to say FUCK YOU RAE!!! :angry: :'(
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