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Postby lenaespiritodefogo » Jan 16th, '07, 21:33

ok this is my first time i drop some of my stuff on TR :P

alright here is goes it has now been two weeks since my grandpa pased away :cry: and i was writitng this i showed to three people, 2 girls and 1 boy, one girl had a tear in her eye, and this was only half completed, the other girl nealy cryed, the one boy suggested it i should record this some time :roll:

but anways here it goes

1st of Jan....2007....tragety stroke
it teared me appart, he took on deep breath and then he was gone


everytime i came round you always had a smile on your face and always in a happy mood
you are my strength to writte these words and now i'm good.
it teared me appart when you were gone that's why today i sit here all alone, looking out the window watching my days go by
cos i never sed that last good bye!
But in your memorie i'll make you proud
i'll be whatever i whish
cos i'll always say it like this

chourus:

Rest in peace grandad....i promise to make you proud... i'll do what you ahve always told me, to never take any bullshit from anyone
and never let them mother fuckers bring me down.

you always picked me up when i fell over
took me in your arms and my crying was over
you always sed that you wud watch over me,
and even today you are looking from above at who i can be.
1st of Jan, so many tears i cryed,
but today i know that you'll always be by side
watching over me, looking after me
and one day i'll make you proud, you will see.
you helped me to become the person who i am today
so when ever i look back, i will always say...

(chorus)

sometimes i whish i cud see ya again like in those times
cos then i wudn't be sitting writting these ryhmes,
i wudn't be cryin' i wud be happy and smilin'
so it's true what they sed all along
that you don't know what ya got til it's gone
and it was from that day i found what i had lost
but for all those tears and all the struggle
for all them bad days and all that trubble
i will always remember who you were so....

(chorus)

one day granpa....one day...... you will see me
becoming who i wanna be....i'll mkae you prud
i'll never let you down
Rest in peace


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Postby Rae » Jan 16th, '07, 22:06

ima sorry about ur loss! i hope ur ok ...

this was very good ... deep ... good flow ...

you should def. start postin ur stuff ;)

keep it up hunn :flower:
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Postby lenaespiritodefogo » Jan 16th, '07, 22:10

Rae wrote:ima sorry about ur loss! i hope ur ok ...

this was very good ... deep ... good flow ...

you should def. start postin ur stuff ;)

keep it up hunn :flower:


thanks a lot :worship: i'll post some of my other stuff soon ;)
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Postby Inches » Jan 17th, '07, 04:17

rip to your grandad
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Postby sinemm » Jan 17th, '07, 21:57

Rae wrote:ima sorry about ur loss! i hope ur ok ...

this was very good ... deep ... good flow ...

you should def. start postin ur stuff ;)

keep it up hunn :flower:


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Postby lenaespiritodefogo » Jan 18th, '07, 21:15

Inches wrote:rip to your grandad


thanks :D
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Postby MoBrat » Jan 18th, '07, 22:18

good flow....i like it...it connected with me on a different level cause i lost my sister but thanks 4 sharing i enjoyed it :worship: :worship: :worship:

if u ever do end up doing an audio of this plz let me know i wanna hear it :happy:
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Postby TiFFany08 » Jan 19th, '07, 04:10

SO sorry about your grandpa seems like you were really close to him

I thought it was really good and also deep
you should write more stuff
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