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Lord Please Forgive Me...

Postby Flamez » Jan 26th, '07, 22:56

lord please forgive for me i'm sorry listen to my common prayers
everywhere i'm at i'm unaware i'm ruining everything nobody cares
tears running down my cheeks hate myself why can't i change
been acting strange feel hate from everyone feel very deranged
i'm out of range an angry demon inside me that i can't control
can't get a hold of myself feel so depressed hurting my own soul
lord give me strength to surpass this blackhole that i'm going deeper in
feel pain inside me i'm hurting everyone evertything everywhere i've been
i think i'm stupid to begin with feel like i've commited more than one sin
no one understands me neither do i i'm begging for you to forgive me lord
giving up on myself feel like its over feel like quitting feels like i'm being ignored
fallin overboard on a cutting board struck in the heart with a deadly sword
please forgive me lord...
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Postby Enimee » Jan 27th, '07, 15:14

dunno why nobody has sed shyt for this its kinda on the WOW good work side of the spectrum


so yeah


WOW good work....

uh yeah if you make a song out of it and get audio hit me up cause im intrested to see where you take this
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Postby sinemm » Jan 27th, '07, 18:01

smh you dont listen to me..
anyways good job tho.. ;)
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Postby *MIRANDA* » Jan 27th, '07, 18:05

good job flamez i luvvved it :flower: !!!
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Postby stevethetruth » Jan 27th, '07, 18:32

dude that shit was better than some of the lyrics i've heard from from a lot of audios on here
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ever think of doing audios? :happy:
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Postby Flamez » Jan 27th, '07, 22:24

thanx everyone for tha comments and sinemm i'm sorry for not listening...


thanx miranda....and enimee thanx man don't know if i'm making this into song...don't know yet...

and steve thanx a lot aswell


yea i thought about audio you'll hear audio from me soon i hope :happy:


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Postby MoBrat » Jan 27th, '07, 22:52

Enimee wrote:dunno why nobody has sed shyt for this its kinda on the WOW good work side of the spectrum


so yeah


WOW good work....

uh yeah if you make a song out of it and get audio hit me up cause im intrested to see where you take this


i agree this is sick i like it...if u ever do an audio let me know 2 cause i like this in text i wanna see how it is in audio
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Postby Flamez » Jan 28th, '07, 10:34

thanx man...

and don't know if i'll do audio...hehe



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Postby ThomasAguanis » Jan 28th, '07, 20:16

great work :worship:
I like the way you wrote this. Aren't you glad you got back to writing?
You're improving a lot so keep it up man :worship: :8)
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Postby Flamez » Jan 28th, '07, 20:24

thanx tom :8)

yes i'm glad i'm back to writing thanx to someone :whistle:

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Postby C-Game » Jan 28th, '07, 20:26

oh shit flamez-inspired and he lyrics sets da thamez-on-fire

some good shit

da topic was nice
and ur da quality of ur drops are ascendin...
as TA said u must be glad dat u left da basket balls for a while and took a pen in ur hand( or keyboard lol)

dats y i always say dont play with balls :)
lol

j/k

good stuff man
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Postby Flamez » Jan 29th, '07, 01:33

lol i still play with my balls as in my basketballs :sweating: i write and play basketball too so i haven't left the basketballs :sweating: hehe


and thanx C-Game :8)



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Postby Inzanity » Feb 12th, '07, 17:04

nice shit it was pretty good.
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Postby Flamez » Feb 12th, '07, 22:13

wasabi wrote:wow you right really cool stuff how do you come up with all these rhymes


i dunno its the emotion i get prolly lol :sweating: thanx for the feed

and EmptyPromises thanx aswell :8)
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