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BS rhyme about creative writing...

Postby polluted » Feb 6th, '07, 19:09

Creative writin is a sort of quick-key typin'...
When u got shit to do n keep em finger tips wipin'...
Whats the matter? u cant sit still?
Like u got full bladder n u cant stay chill?
The thing is I gon' lose my thought flow...
Its like when u get head or juss receive swing or a blow...
U need to steam out real slow 'fore u count em words n..
U see that it aint real show n u prolly lack a word 'nerd'...
Damn. that gotta be heard, this fella is droppin off the cuff...
WEll, anyway he aint got no dome, n whatever he say is bluff...
I bet u need to follow what ya heart tells u to do?
U know, I play guitar and try to sing when take a shit in the loo...
But thats the type of creativity too, u know, u juss gotta pursue...
Got no clue? shut down ya PC n go do somtin useful n new...




lol... :D



feedback if u fell u need...
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Re: BS rhyme about creative writing...

Postby 4D » Feb 7th, '07, 09:52

polluted wrote:feedback if u fell u need...


Actually not bad, considering you wrote it. Was your best shit that I've seen anyway, nothing complex in the area of multies or flow, just average man, but keep it up, you're improving. At least you're "Rhymes" are rhyming these days lol. :D

Funny line:
U know, I play guitar and try to sing when take a shit in the loo...

lol
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Re: BS rhyme about creative writing...

Postby polluted » Feb 7th, '07, 10:03

FORDIE wrote:
polluted wrote:feedback if u fell u need...


Actually not bad, considering you wrote it. Was your best shit that I've seen anyway, nothing complex in the area of multies or flow, just average man, but keep it up, you're improving. At least you're "Rhymes" are rhyming these days lol. :D

Funny line:
U know, I play guitar and try to sing when take a shit in the loo...

lol


ait 4d, acknowledged....
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