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Spiritual Lyrical Tourney Winner is MARTH

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Spiritual Lyrical Tourney Winner is MARTH

Postby Kez » Feb 7th, '07, 19:00

2 DROPS
Make ur votes
Select da best you think


ANYWAY KEEP EM VOTES COMIN

first to reach 3 votes goes to next round

VOTERS ( no specific restrictions ...OPEN to everyone )

topic DEALIN WITH LIFE
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Postby Kez » Feb 7th, '07, 19:03

A-Game:

Life is hard to deal, but i live to die, and i die to live
I might forgive, that night on the cliff, when death was to bright I think
My life is going up and down , down and up
I write tough as dan brown, but sumtimes it sucks
When I’m happy I’m not the best, but I do when I’m sad
That’s when I think of the afterlife and death



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B-Game:
The best of times and the worst of times
Getting pissed off when people come to me and whine
Best day ever I met the girl of my dreams
Next day I found out she ain't what she seems to be
Bitch was cheatin with my best friend in the world
Now when I think of her she makes me wanna hurl
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Postby C-Game » Feb 7th, '07, 19:57

well since i didnt know whos verse is whos im gonna vote...
dam im organizin this stuff so i never get da chance to vote :'(

oki here goes A-Game had a good start ..i liked da first 2 lines and it was really deep..
i dunno abt dan brown so no judgment thr
i like da endin 2 lines as well
overall good drop and stayed within da topic

B-Game

Started good but was talkin abt a girl...i dunno but imo he went a lil off topic at times..even though da meanin was good and real..


FINAL VOTE ill have to say A-Game gets ma vote

good job both of u to makin up to da finals outta 7 contestants ...

COME ON PEOPLE VOTE
its only 12 lines...
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Postby MoBrat » Feb 7th, '07, 20:33

ok well both are good and have a form of connection with me....

A-Game
very good stuff first line caught my attention it's almost like biggie and tupac runnin "y am i dying to live if im just living to die"
good rhymes and it has some emotion in it and u were on topic

B-Game
first two lines are good but after that it's a little off topic of Dealing With Life it seems like u are writing more about ur life then dealing with life but there was emotion put into it and it connected with me in a way

OVERALL -- A-Game cause u were effective with what u said and u stayed on the topic of dealing with life
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Postby DjSnax » Feb 7th, '07, 22:45

I don't know if its really my place, but I'm ganna say somethin anyway.

I didn't really love either, but seeing how A-game stayed with life and B-game was more toward relationships I'd have to go with A.
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Feb 7th, '07, 22:48

well B-games, was kool but some uneccesery words

example:

Best day ever I met the girl of my dreams
Next day I found out she ain't what she seems to be

the bolded completely ruined that whole line for me, it just through me off

the opening wasnt very creative either, i mean i think i heard the in movies/books amillion times

A-games was better, but ryhming was weak

example:

When I
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Postby C-Game » Feb 8th, '07, 19:12

winner is A-Game...who ever that is...

will da real A-Game please standup

i know its either TheWeirdoIsBack or Marth :)


congratulations...

PLS RESPOND by the winner coz kez has lost da original drops :angry:
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Postby Marth » Feb 9th, '07, 18:30

It"s me it's me it's me waahoooooo
The world has gone crazy like eminem on kim
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Postby C-Game » Feb 9th, '07, 18:33

Marth wrote:It"s me it's me it's me waahoooooo


CONGRATULATIONS MAN :worship: :worship:

you have beaten some of the best here in TR

hope da others congratulate u as well...
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Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Feb 9th, '07, 18:46

congratz marth.... :worship: :flower:
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Postby 4D » Feb 9th, '07, 23:26

I never should have lost the first round, lol yall bastids ignored my verse! :whistle:

Congrats Marth, well done!! :smoking:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Feb 10th, '07, 01:57

FORDIE wrote:I never should have lost the first round, lol yall bastids ignored my verse! :whistle:

Congrats Marth, well done!! :smoking:


lol i started of with the creatice writig mind ( ask steve) the i battled a couple of times and TS became my whole text inspiration so i truely turned into mc style text and lost the creative wiritng side, thats why i got put out, dam my escuse is good :smoking:

congratz marth :happy:
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Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Feb 10th, '07, 03:36

Marth wrote:It"s me it's me it's me waahoooooo



Yo congrats man, you kicked my ass I'll admit it. But I ain't get a single vote, so I ain't gonna let it go just like that. I'ma work on my style and rhymes, and I'll see you next tourney bro.
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