My First Attempt

[IceAxe]

I been writein for a long time, but i just recently got serious about it and this was my first shot at makein a hot verse.


Always on point with words that cut sharp/callin me wack is a paradox like nerds that aint smart/

this shit here's my piece of art/representin the full spectrum from the positive to the deepest dark/

I spit the shit like a sword that can touch the heart/I rip the clips to scorch the upper part/

delve deep into lyrical weaponry/been savein this for a long time for later use like kinetic energy/

im not typical mentaly/pictured through my lyrical tendencies/and serial killa chemestry/

when i prepared this song/I was ready to go longer than marathons/and leave you mystified, starin long/

the flow on this track, it's harsh/ leave you gaspin for breath like you contracted SARS/

I wanna do this shit actual and professional/speakin the truth like i'm in a Catholic confessional/

rappin harder than the hardest known granite/ got the illest flow on the planet/ this i know, and i dont take it for granted/

this music leaves me enchanted/ i want a spot in it i demand it/call me whack, I dont care if i get reprimanded/

try to shoot me down, i'll withstand it/just give me a chance, open your mind and expand it/

I write the type a rhymes that's like a long twisted labyrinth/hard to follow if the knowledge of where you're goin is gone, missin, absent/

rappin cicles 'round most like piss in a urinal/leave ya frame of mind twisted and your condition terminal/

after i leave the mic hotter than the plains of the Serengeti/i wonder what the legends would say if they met me/


tell me what how i did

[DC4952]

u got some pretty good rhmes in there. the multies sre good too. nice job on this

[Global]

nice job, keep at it, you'll get better, and better, practice makes perfect

But no one is perfect

[Flamez]

nice job on this just like maybe said keep it at you'll get better..

[IceAxe]

thanks everyone who gave feedback