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Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 21st, '07, 17:27

im ready for the game cuz im deadly with the aim
y'all upset im ashamed
but i set in the flames to the net when i came
and you'll get wet in the paint from my sweat on your face
cuz ya'll aint met someone great with the text i create

oh yes i have made the next level so step it up ace, better update
n catch ya a break to collect at the bank

never just wait cuz i kept it the same n connected like stakes when i progressed n i thank my master,
my saint who respected my traits to inject
in those who knew it was to be said
and let them escape the depths of the hate
or my message be late and
the rest would change into the devils dead weight
if their lessons dictated from past actions and mistakes
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Postby 4D » Feb 21st, '07, 22:31

That's great man, I really like your style, clever multies, great flow, stick around and try and get involved in the rap battles section! :smoking:
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Postby Big-T » Feb 22nd, '07, 00:20

yeah i agree wiv Fordie, a pretty nice verse, a lot of cool multis keep it up man! :smoking:
Clones are people two.
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Postby Enimee » Feb 22nd, '07, 01:46

yeah ALOT of multis. i like the flow on the single line in the middle that was hard


word to the wise "dont over flow with multis"


u connected them good this time but soon u'll start reachin and it wont flow as well but yeh hot shit
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Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 22nd, '07, 04:56

i will startbattlin soon seein that i have daily access here but i still dont have much time to do this so i need about 3 days to respond maybe...

also ive been on this board awhile, i just changed my name to something more original than KDoG
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Postby Flamez » Feb 22nd, '07, 04:58

that was great, has good flow and overall i like it :8)
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