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Im Possesed

Postby JMG » Feb 28th, '07, 00:45

Verse 1 of 10

peoples say i need to checkin a mental hospital
they claim im crazy i should get an exorsim if possible
every pastor i walk by dectects evil
i went around and injected 8 people with an aids infected needle
every step i make is less legal my best friend is a pet begel
but once my mic and rhymes colide its a fatal atraction
my style is flamable rappin added with a patch of lit matches
kidnapped aladdin straped him to a matress in my aparment
cuz i was sick of traffic i had to have his magic carpet
now im rapein jasmine takin asprin tryin to elimanate this ackin
got a bitch chained in the basment claimin shes dehaydratin
i cut her loose once she didnt even try escapin just signald for water
i said bitch dont beg now u gotta wait a little longer
get back in ur room stop the cryin and damn bitchin
this aint no fuckin soup or ham kitchin
this will be over as soon as i get my ammunition
so stop sobbin *but i dont wanna die*
shut the fuck up cunt its not an option
ull never see my bitch ass without a blunt
i tried witchcraft once and it wasnt to much fun
i got my ass whiped by a angry demon
then he grabed me quick and made me eat him
ever since ive been in misery
my head wont stop spinnin literally
i dont have full control of my actions
i feel like i sold my soul and i keep hearin a guy laughin
i tried goin to church but couldnt make it up the steps
my sided started to hurt and i lost all my breath
i started to sweat got home and saw my begal starved to death



verse 2 is on the way
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Postby Enimee » Feb 28th, '07, 00:48

Not bad pretty psycotic and synical but not bad cant wait for verse 2
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Postby JMG » Feb 28th, '07, 00:50

thanks it will be up soon
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Postby Rain Matrix » Feb 28th, '07, 01:23

some1 switch tha title 2 "Jmjeezy's Retarded" oh keep verse 2 I'm feelin like a key drop murda!

it's like yur a Cop, Funny a [C Saw], that he knew Plenty of Key Drops
a drunk 1 Play Teaser, Monday Ceaser, Some Say Neither, u can't B Hot
Jeezy,'s stan without T.V. Pride Finds Tha Claim of yur Fight Wack
Speedy at making me Queasy so u Hide Behind A Name Like That!
Retreat from Wrath, or get Beat Bad, yur a Weak Act, who can't Speak Facts
it's like Free Laughs, I'm tha truth, fairy, why u asking 4 yur Teeth Back!
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Postby JMG » Feb 28th, '07, 02:15

u just started a war boy


rain matrix ? why is this guy hear the skys clear
dont bring ur fake rhymes here
no meanin i mean geez mama please
let me murder this wanna be kenua reeves
ill be doin everyone a favor
puttin my gun to ur brainless flavor im stainless hater
ur masturbatin to ur avatator
tryin to serve me but i stabed the waiter
tryin to bite me but i slaped the gator
dont come at me ull get ur raps fliped and ur ass kicked
ur shit isnt effiecent enough to do those matrix back flips
u can have my teeth fairy but im grincin ur pride
thinkin u can rhyme but ur livin a lie
stop bitchin ur fake up against me is like fishin with no bait
huntin with no ammo up against somethin like rambo
damn yo ur licence for crisis is offically out of date
ur rain turn to ice and im bout to skate
ur matrix needs to reload but for ur own benefit
change ur style i raped this child thats the end of it
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Postby Inches » Feb 28th, '07, 04:28

Jm definitly the greatest
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Postby JMG » Feb 28th, '07, 04:30

fiannly someone admits
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Postby Inches » Feb 28th, '07, 04:43

Jmgeezy wrote:fiannly someone admits


i was being sarcastic,
you aint that good man
and maybe would murder you
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Postby stevethetruth » Feb 28th, '07, 04:50

McMaybe wrote:Thank you for that eminem influenced verse....
http://www.myspace.com/stevethetruth <-- my myspace add me!!
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Postby JMG » Feb 28th, '07, 05:07

how many kids will copy probaly millions but im gonna do this as a fuckin hobbie till then



im one of those millions
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Postby D@vid » Feb 28th, '07, 05:13

they're just haters, i say u go and give em or dre ur demo right now :loser:
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Postby JMG » Feb 28th, '07, 05:15

well ur probaly bein sarcastic to but just so u all no i know this shit lives in me i dream about rhymes literally no one here noes about me and idc i love what u haters say keep it comin
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Postby Inches » Feb 28th, '07, 05:20

Jmgeezy wrote:well ur probaly bein sarcastic to but just so u all no i know this shit lives in me i dream about rhymes literally no one here noes about me and idc i love what u haters say keep it comin


ok
well....
your dreams suck.
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Postby $0 R3@L » Feb 28th, '07, 05:23

Jmgeezy wrote:well ur probaly bein sarcastic to but just so u all no i know this shit lives in me i dream about rhymes literally no one here noes about me and idc i love what u haters say keep it comin


you wont go far put the mic down like the one in you avatar :wink:
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Postby Block » Feb 28th, '07, 07:07

Even tho you talked some shit in my bar battle; I don't find this too bad. I guess you see alot of Eminem-Inspired drops here, but where I'm from they're rare. So I kinda liked this.
Your flow is off in some spots, and you could work on your multies. But overall I liked it.

But on a side-note: Don't fuck with maybe ;)
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