Im Possesed

by **JMG** » Feb 28th, '07, 07:24

well thanks and ur rhymes were good as hell thats why i kinda found it hard to belive u wrote it in 15 and since ur shit is actually some of the only shit that is good on here can u tell me where my flow was off so i can work on it

by **Block** » Feb 28th, '07, 07:49

Just the way you word things.. I'll take your verse and word it different and show you how it flows much better.

They say i need to check a mental hospital
they claim im crazy- Is exorsim possible?
every pastor i walk by dectects an evil within
Walk around injecting people with an aids infected needle-syringe
every step i make is less legal my best friend is a pet begel
but once my mic and rhymes colide its a fatal attraction
my style; flamable rappin, added with a patch of lit matches
kidnapped aladdin, straped him to a matress in my aparment
cuz i was sick of traffic.. Just had to have his carpet
now im rapin jasmine takin asprin tryin to elimanate this ackin back an'..
got a bitch chained in the basment claimin shes dehaydratin
i cut her loose once she didnt try 'scapin just signaled for water
i said bitch dont beg now u gotta wait a little longer
get back in ur room stop the cryin and damn bitchin
this aint no fuckin soup or ham kitchin
this shit'll be over when I group my ammunition <<< Still kinda off there.
so stop sobbin *but i dont wanna die*
shut the fuck up cunt its not an option
ull never see my ass without a blunt
i tried witchcraft once, but it wasnt much fun
i got my ass whiped by an angry demon
then he grabbed me quick and just made me eat him
ever since ive been the spawn of evil
in misery my head wont stop spinnin- literally
i dont have full control of my actions
i feel like i sold my soul- Keep laughin
i tried goin to church but couldnt make it up the steps
my side started to hurt as i lost my breath
Exhausted sweat- got home and saw my begal starved to death

by **Block** » Feb 28th, '07, 07:50

I took out alot of the filler words you had, like "I and is the" etc. Added a few more complex words and it flows nicely.

by **JMG** » Feb 28th, '07, 07:59

aight ill keep that in mind next time

by **Block** » Feb 28th, '07, 08:36

you're mean, bro, lol. :snack:

by **JMG** » Feb 28th, '07, 08:41

the site is built up with serval forginers but what really piss me off is the devil worshipers

by **JMG** » Feb 28th, '07, 08:46

battle me tommrow bitch

by **JMG** » Feb 28th, '07, 08:58

dude lets just battle tommrow and end it cuz i no u aint better then me

by **NoLimitWordz** » Feb 28th, '07, 11:41

Jmgeezy wrote:dude lets just battle tommrow and end it cuz i no u aint better then me

lol dude not only is Maybe better than you...he's light years ahead of anything your even capable of so just give the shit up before you get humiliated...your just lucky this aint audio or he'd really shit all over you like he did the last time he had an e-beef....lol

by **Rain Matrix** » Feb 28th, '07, 19:43

did some1 give this kid a lyrical head injury I diss him on his own "whateva that is" he replied wit ha gator slapping diss aimed at tha world wildlife foundation and waiter haters maybe?

But alas mcmaybe gets tha E- Beef, well jmjeezy it's good u have dreams but if u bring yur mic 2 this battle u might as well use it as a pillow

Night night

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