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Postby JMG » Mar 28th, '07, 03:59

im hotter then the sun
ur not son im fly un
cuz im fly son
my chain is nice
im spittin flames
i hope i dont melt my ice
my belt is tight
like my rhymes aight
thats the reason why ur not hot
more reasons i got
i said more reasons i got
to explain why ur not hot
and why my chain is so cold
i think i caught a cold
im ridin dirty into a pole
i started a fire by just walkin
now there chargin me with arson
another reason why im hot
if i get close to an ac it breaks
and i over heat the place
and that is why im fly
like a plane in the sky
yes i said fly as a plane
i make it rain
i have a big brain
and my chain is nuts
and that is why im hot
ur not ur doodly squat
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Postby D@vid » Mar 28th, '07, 04:02

if ur at the same level as me lyrically, i wouldn't even bother posting it cuz its just an embarrassment and i also wouldn't write about topics that have been outplayed for a while and are lame. u basically just repeated the same shit and the funny thing is is that its a lame thing to say to begin with
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Postby JMG » Mar 28th, '07, 04:04

dude i put my heart in that cant u tell .. fuckin idiot
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Postby D@vid » Mar 28th, '07, 04:06

i thought u were jokin, but i wasn't sure
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Postby JMG » Mar 28th, '07, 04:07

i am?
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Postby Ethos » Mar 28th, '07, 04:10

OMG I can feel your pain, love and, stress. :worship:
It's a masterpiece. You should do an audio so I can use some of it for a sample. :p
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Postby D@vid » Mar 28th, '07, 04:11

Jmgeezy wrote:i am?



if ur not, then u should just end ur life right now or at least stop writing shit like that
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Postby JMG » Mar 28th, '07, 04:13

dude how u gonna say thats not complex
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Mar 28th, '07, 04:19

Thats Not Complex
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Postby $0 R3@L » Mar 28th, '07, 04:23

my 12 year old friend who has down syndrome,no left or right hand,is partly sighted,has no left leg and considers the spice girls 'ledgends' could write up a verse better then that.
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Postby JMG » Mar 28th, '07, 04:26

go head and doubt but like unk im gonna walk it out
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Postby Rain Matrix » Mar 28th, '07, 05:49

What u should do is PRINT IT OUT and throw it in tha garbage
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Postby BaZZ » Mar 28th, '07, 07:26

are you mims?
"Hard hearted beast with a jaw full of meat
Engulfed in a feast while you starve at his feet
He toss you the least little portion of a piece
To the floor and expect you to rejoice when you eat" - Brother Ali
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Postby Flamez » Mar 28th, '07, 15:21

this is basic, up your game..
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Postby stevethetruth » Mar 28th, '07, 17:15

damn umm how do i put this nicely ...that was the wackest lyrics i've ever read .......


if you are even thinking of doing rap serious you have to fucking step your game up cause this shit ain't gonna get you anything except laughed at no offense.... ;)
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