Make me a Soldier

by **JMG** » Apr 6th, '07, 00:52

ive been in force b4 i was in the force so make me a soldier
lift me higher take me over above all of u
ive been shoved back to the wall and i think im fallin though
i want all of it tonight im in charge of this life
dont dispute it theres no room for arguments or fights
its time to breath and till i receive i aint givin shit again
time to leave these slutty girls and ignorant friends
cuz ill tear off there head and piss down there throat
if they cause me to miss out on the boat
when im tryin to be captin there tryin to deprive rappin
like pirates attackin i am the baddest
fainlly a free man and takin over its just the kings plan
ive been shot down but not now look at the wing span
so im gonna continute to paint my art
and it would take a brave heart to break jace of spades apart

by **Hoopz** » Apr 6th, '07, 00:56

nice shit

by **Rae** » Apr 6th, '07, 01:20

i agree.

i like it. keep it up

by **Enimee** » Apr 6th, '07, 01:44

wow it wasnt that great it was ok-ish tho nuthin spectacular to make me hoop n hollar or even smirk but keep at it

by **Hoopz** » Apr 6th, '07, 02:25

Enimee wrote:wow it wasnt that great it was ok-ish tho nuthin spectacular to make me hoop n hollar or even smirk but keep at it

nice comment from someone who ain puttin anything better :unsure:

by **JMG** » Apr 6th, '07, 02:35

thank u guys

and enimee is puttin out better shit

Enimee wrote:she took my heart and ripped it up
now im left with a million peices so wut
maybe it wuz my fault well mos likely
cant change how itz ended so jus bite me
thats me yellin at my conscience itz botherin me again
yellin "YOU FUCKED UP AND LOST THE BESTEST GIRLFRIEND"
so its ironic left here to dwell on the past...
i miss u babe maybe we can be together at last...

by **Enimee** » Apr 6th, '07, 02:41

dat wuznt even better hoopz iz pretty much right jm i been slow it it but i aint focusin on no site neifa so yeh but yall want me to post shit? cuz i actually post full songz yall got line by line in this mofo thats why i stopped come at me wit a couple versus and a hook aspirin to make da shit audio and ull get better commentz das why i stopped commentin on rain matrix's shitz it began to become a waste of time and hiz talent so i stopped

by **JMG** » Apr 6th, '07, 02:43

yeah im gonna put a full song on here nah there to good and they aint copywrited

by **stevethetruth** » Apr 6th, '07, 02:51

ok i'm doing your ass a huge favor here

here's the original verse right:

ive been in force b4 i was in the force so make me a soldier
lift me higher take me over above all of u
ive been shoved back to the wall and i think im fallin though
i want all of it tonight im in charge of this life
dont dispute it theres no room for arguments or fights
its time to breath and till i receive i aint givin shit again
time to leave these slutty girls and ignorant friends
cuz ill tear off there head and piss down there throat
if they cause me to miss out on the boat
when im tryin to be captin there tryin to deprive rappin
like pirates attackin i am the baddest
fainlly a free man and takin over its just the kings plan
ive been shot down but not now look at the wing span
so im gonna continute to paint my art
and it would take a brave heart to break jace of spades apart

here's my verison with some changes i made:

ive been in force taking over so make me a soldier
lift me higher take me over above your shoulders
ive been shoved back to the wall i think im fallin though
i want all of it tonight im this is the dream i pursue
dont dispute it theres no room for arguments or fights
its time to breath and till i receive boy this is my right!
time to leave these slutty girls and ignorant friends
cuz ill tear off there head kill them dead there's no end
if they cause me to miss out on the boat
thinking i'm a loser trying to make me choke
when im tryin to be captin there tryin to deprive rappin
like pirates attackin i am the baddest thing crackin'
fainlly a free man and takin over its just the kings plan
ive been shot down but not now look at the wing span
so im gonna continute to paint my art
and it would take a brave heart
to break a jack of spades apart
so motherfucker, think before you start

i think with the edits i made (took me like 3 minutes) make the whole thing flow better and shit

trying to help you here and show you what you need and can improve on :happy:

by **Enimee** » Apr 6th, '07, 03:10

nice edit stevey wonder...and who steals music off a fuckin site.......???????

by **JMG** » Apr 6th, '07, 03:17

thanks for the help

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