Short Practice i Did tonight

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Inspired by life retired from strife entwire the knife desire is rife
re-wire this time move higher the rhyme i acquire and climb
my prime is mine spit grime to sublime and never rewind
to find and unwind the grinned behind mankind i refined my mind
you must be blind to see you confind or flee im maligned and free


i did it tonight, then got distracted and stopped writing it and now i got other stuff to write and since this was just practice for ryhmes and stuff it aint gonni be a track

so feed please

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multis are great but to make them work they gotta retain actual meaning.

for example:

you must be blind to see you confide or flee im maligned and free

confide : Confer trust upon / Reveal in private / tell confidentially

maligned : Speak unfavorably about / bad mouth someone

now when you read that line it really makes no sense to me.Maybe some sublinimal sense to you but the main thing with lyrics is to ensure the listner/reader can connect and detect what point your tryna make or a story your tryna tell.

Otherwise its like tryna crack a di vinci code of jibberish.

Other then this is multi galore and the flow is great.Good job,you should audio

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multis are great but to make them work they gotta retain actual meaning.

for example:

you must be blind to see you confide or flee im maligned and free

confide : Confer trust upon / Reveal in private / tell confidentially

maligned : Speak unfavorably about / bad mouth someone

now when you read that line it really makes no sense to me.Maybe some sublinimal sense to you but the main thing with lyrics is to ensure the listner/reader can connect and detect what point your tryna make or a story your tryna tell.

Otherwise its like tryna crack a di vinci code of jibberish.

Other then this is multi galore and the flow is great.Good job,you should audio

confind, well the meaning i know is if you confind someone away you hide them away

and the meaning i had for maligned, was that you assail in a laugnage witch i thought was basiclaly the same as excelling in a laungage

well i just sean i had confide, i meant confind, i wrote it ( see this is why i type stuff lol ) and when typing it up i musta messed up

anywae props man i know bout tryna keep the meaning for a listener thats what im trying to work in so i can try adapt this style to audio lol as you can see i have along way to go before i spit somehting like this

n thx for actually feeding last time anyone gave me feed in this section the ice age was just finishing

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lol no problem man.Usually the standard of writing in this section isnt worthy of even viewing let alone replying.But this was first one in ages that was actually good.Hope to see it in audio certainly worth an attempt

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[Hadez]

it was dope, i liked it. i dont have much feed to give cuz so real said everything i was gonna say . its real good. propz.

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it was dope, i liked it. i dont have much feed to give cuz so real said everything i was gonna say . its real good. propz.

thx man lol even just akchnowledging it is good feed man

[Tash8]

it sounds good on paper but will it sound good on audio ?

good job though

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it sounds good on paper but will it sound good on audio ?

good job though

no it wouldnt lol i already sayed im still practicing flowing this ryhme structure, i will attempt it on my tape though

thx 4 reading

[Tash8]

yea good luck on it.. I'm really anxious to hear the audio for it.

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yea good luck on it.. I'm really anxious to hear the audio for it.

means you'll need to donwload my mixtape

[Tash8]

that'd be fine, when will it be out?

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that'd be fine, when will it be out?

hmm i dunno right now, i re-started it coz i was slacking, but now its goin real smooth and ive decided to change it to around a 18 full track mixtape (meaning 18 songs thats not including skits) probly around a month and a half

untill them make sure you feed my tracks in audio stage i aint sure if you did lol if you alreayd did sorry lol

[Tash8]

I will feed when i see them, and yea i can't wait to hear it.

[Inches]

it was dope, i liked it. i dont have much feed to give cuz so real said everything i was gonna say . its real good. propz.

lol what he said