Not In Time

[Rain Matrix]

I Wake Up 2 Fake Fucks, they Make Us Take Drugs, no Real Appeal
Heavy Play Everyday, Steady Ways, like Ready Pay, I Seal Tha Deal

1 Guys Sunrise Unties as tha Fun Dies, u see life is A Charming Wait
Doom Calls till tha Moon Falls, this Room Brawls, at an Alarming Rate

Advances And Chances, Land, This Hand Dances, u'll Drop Like Rain
See Fools Merc Talk, Preschool Workshops, thats why, I Got Fights Slain

lifes Boundries have Found Me, something like being locked up in County
I'm That Boss, Back Off, u Rap Soft, and Lack Cause, I have a Bounty

try 2 Feel Better, stay Real Forever, some want 2 Steal Treasures, it's Pains Aim
I Maintain 4 these Plain Brains, my drops Change Flames so I can Gain Fame

Keep Recieving Little Bits Hurled At U, We Fell Now Descents Faster, Till Tha Bottom
Deep Decieving Riddles This World Thats True, Retell How Recent Disasters Still A Problem

[Global]

well this was better than your other stuff




its not great but not bad either 7/10

[Tash8]

not bad, but something I noticed you do

try 2 Feel Better, stay Real Forever, some want 2 Steal Treasures, it's Pains Aim

that's 2 syllables and then 3 syllables so just watch for that, otherwise it's sounds aite. too much rhyming for me though.

[Hadez]

wow this is tight . i cant compare it to your other writings cuz i haven't read much, but its good regardless.

[stevethetruth]

the rhymes are too forced stop forcing them and go with your natural flow

[Tash8]

the rhymes are too forced stop forcing them and go with your natural flow

finally, someone who agrees with me... there's no need that every other word need to rhyme unless your like me who's just trying to work on multis and structure, but I don't think you are..