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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Apr 26th, '07, 00:28

i live in a location were techno's the foundation the fustration is real
and temptation to feel salvation is steel sensation to steal
a admoration of crime combination to ryhme dedication to climb
no compensation in time just keep the concentration in mind
anticipation is nice determination mines twice at discrimination i clamp vise
my imagination the price affiliation is vice my organization turn to ice


ok i know its short :sweating:

i was using the technique i used a while back when i was just goin on to multi's you will notice the core ryhme i chose was "ation" then i basically go through the dictionary get words that end in "ation" write them down then form a ryhme trying to link these words together, it helps me basically learn new words and overall improves skills lol

anywae feed please :flower: it took me a while to do :(
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Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Apr 26th, '07, 00:35

Nice stuff man, keep workin' in this fashion and the song'll turn out sick. I don't see or hear a lot of 'ations' bein' used in songs so its cool usin' words that are kinda hard to ryhme.
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Apr 26th, '07, 00:36

TheWeirdoIsBack wrote:Nice stuff man, keep workin' in this fashion and the song'll turn out sick. I don't see or hear a lot of 'ations' bein' used in songs so its cool usin' words that are kinda hard to ryhme.


thx man :worship:


i dunno if ill continue it lol or ever do audio i just did it for practice :happy:
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Postby IceAxe » Apr 26th, '07, 00:39

I had the same basic idea but with words that end in "ition" [like 'position']

the lyrics were good, could be a great song if you kept workin on it
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Apr 26th, '07, 00:41

iceaxe187 wrote:I had the same basic idea but with words that end in "ition" [like 'position']

the lyrics were good, could be a great song if you kept workin on it


yeh its a great way for practice man, i did it alot a while ago when i was trying to grasp multi's n more complexty but then i stopped practicing for a bit n wrote songs more lol


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Postby Inches » Apr 26th, '07, 00:48

:worship: :worship:
nice man,... amazin
sounds like itd make an intense audio
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Postby Flamez » Apr 26th, '07, 01:19

nice stuff bar :worship:
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 26th, '07, 01:22

I like the idea of learning new words through that but I don't think that'll make good in audio because it seemed like you forced the rhymes...

I don't know how to explain it but it just doesn't work you can't try to rhyme every other word...

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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Apr 26th, '07, 01:29

Tash8 wrote:I like the idea of learning new words through that but I don't think that'll make good in audio because it seemed like you forced the rhymes...

I don't know how to explain it but it just doesn't work you can't try to rhyme every other word...

Keep it Up...


lol you obviously havent listened to thomas, the skill to ryhme everything is very possible without it being forced, its a dificult skill but it does work for some people, and when i spit this nothing is forced it comes of with a nice accapella flow, i havent nor would i try it on beat coz i aint that good yet but it isnt forced lol and hopefully when i keep practicing i will be able to flow stuff with this many ryhmes to a beat its one of my targets :D

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Postby joelle » Apr 26th, '07, 01:33

a admoration of crime combination to ryhme dedication to climb
no compensation in time just keep the concentration in mind


that part is my favorite
And yeah, it doesn't really sound forced now, but just be careful, cuz sometimes it can end up sounding like you're reading a dictionary.
good stuff though
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Apr 26th, '07, 02:01

joelle wrote:
a admoration of crime combination to ryhme dedication to climb
no compensation in time just keep the concentration in mind


that part is my favorite
And yeah, it doesn't really sound forced now, but just be careful, cuz sometimes it can end up sounding like you're reading a dictionary.
good stuff though


lol probly coz i did read the dictionary when writing it lol

thx for reading and for the feed :worship:
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Postby joelle » Apr 26th, '07, 02:30

^ I know you did, and that's a good technique, but the tricky part is making it sound like you WEREN'T reading a dictionary. :p
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 26th, '07, 02:51

lol you obviously havent listened to thomas, the skill to ryhme everything is very possible without it being forced, its a dificult skill but it does work for some people, and when i spit this nothing is forced it comes of with a nice accapella flow, i havent nor would i try it on beat coz i aint that good yet but it isnt forced lol and hopefully when i keep practicing i will be able to flow stuff with this many ryhmes to a beat its one of my targets :D

props on the feed :worship:


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exactly you'd need great skills to be able to flow this on a beat. I'm sure if you worked on it you'd get it, but I ment it doesn't sound good when I read it.. but maybe when I hear it it'll sound good.. know what i'm saying?
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Apr 26th, '07, 02:57

Tash8 wrote:
lol you obviously havent listened to thomas, the skill to ryhme everything is very possible without it being forced, its a dificult skill but it does work for some people, and when i spit this nothing is forced it comes of with a nice accapella flow, i havent nor would i try it on beat coz i aint that good yet but it isnt forced lol and hopefully when i keep practicing i will be able to flow stuff with this many ryhmes to a beat its one of my targets :D

props on the feed :worship:


thx inches + flamez :worship:


exactly you'd need great skills to be able to flow this on a beat. I'm sure if you worked on it you'd get it, but I ment it doesn't sound good when I read it.. but maybe when I hear it it'll sound good.. know what i'm saying?


yeh i get ya :smoking:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Apr 26th, '07, 13:21

bump for feed :8)
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