I had 2

[Rain Matrix]

I crossed tha Line, my Mind was in a Bind, it didn't know what 2 Find
or where it was Going, I was Flowing, never Knowing tha final Rhyme

I overworked I merced, it got Worse, u saw me Burst, my Down In Flames Aim
no Stress no Seeds, u Best Proceed, 2 Rest Befilef , this mountain Name Rain

[James R.]

Yo I dont know what the last line meant, but I think you're trying to be wayyyy too mystical with what your saying. It's just my opinion that it's better to just say what you mean and avoid seemingly random metaphors and unnecessary wordplay that usually doesn't make sense. I'll give this a 4/10 mainly because I don't understand it.