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4 free, 4 me

Postby Rain Matrix » Apr 28th, '07, 20:55

u took shots, I HAD NO SHIELD, but I'm still alive on this BATTLEFIELD
on a HOSPITAL BED my BOSS RIDDLES DEAD, I know what THAT'LL YIELD

I've PROMISED FOES, my ACCOMPLISED FLOW, will always be Tha HONEST TRUTH
u FOLLOW LEADS, I see yur HOLLOW READS, yur like an ASTONISHED SLEUTH

hot on MY TRAIL, WHY BAIL, if yur hoping I FAIL, tellin yur SLY TALES
u can TRY MAIL, WHY HAIL, these INDIVIDIUALS VISUALS LY FRAIL

UNKNOWN is my 1 HOME, UNCLEAR is what SOME FEAR, that would be this VERY FLOW
is channeled like STEREO, u read it and yur like THERE HE GOES all becuz I BURY FOES
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Postby Kez » Apr 28th, '07, 21:03

Hot shit, except for the 5th and 6th, those made no sense.
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Postby Rain Matrix » Apr 28th, '07, 21:42

Thanx thats tha first positive feed I've had in a while

I truly am sorry 4 tha audio I dropped I hope it doen't effect voting in my ban battle against bar
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 28th, '07, 21:59

i loved the first 2 bars and last one, but the 3rd one, i just didn't understand.

keep it up, this is what i used to love reading.
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Postby James R. » Apr 29th, '07, 18:26

Lines 5 and 6 were just a bunch of rhyming words... maybe there's a deeper meaning that I dont get? If so please explain. Otherwise it was alright. It sounds like you were battling the mirror for fun or something. Like a keystyle that was built like a battle, but not actually for someone? 6/10
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