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Postby James R. » Apr 30th, '07, 19:58

This is an actual song I wrote a lil while back, but apparently I forgot about a chorus. I'm no good wit hooks anyways so it's no big deal. Anyways, enjoy and leave feed

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Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Apr 30th, '07, 20:01

its kool :smoking:
would be dope to hear this as audio :worship:
*waits fo james to drop audio* :tapping:
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Postby Kojack » Apr 30th, '07, 20:20

Nice drop dude
i hope you the best

from which movie with 2Pac is your Avy
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Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Apr 30th, '07, 20:22

Kojack wrote:
from which movie with 2Pac is your Avy

its from the vid 'gansgta party [ft snopp dogg]'
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Postby IceAxe » Apr 30th, '07, 20:23

nice stuff...it'd would make good audio. I suck at hooks too, I know how ya feel.
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Postby Hadez » Apr 30th, '07, 20:49

you got some ill writings... good job man, props :worship:
keep it up :flower:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Apr 30th, '07, 21:19

great song man, only thing i can say it just keep doin what your doin keep elevating, you got a level head so i guess you know what stuff to work on yourself so just keep working on it

and if you ever doin audio and needing a hook ill help you out with it if ya want :happy:

i never thought of myself good at hooks but most tracks ive did now people like the hooks alot so lol
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Postby James R. » Apr 30th, '07, 21:44

Thanks for the feedback everybody I appreciate it. And Bar, yeah I usually know what I need to work on, I just get bored with shit so I just stop workin on it lol. I usually do songs like this in about 40mins. This one took like 30. I hate doin drafts haha. But thanks again

And hadez, thanks a lot, I appreciate it.

Whenever anybody needs feed just lemme know and I'll break it down for you. Same wit battle votes, I might start gettin active in battling soon just to pass the time until I can get some money for recording shit.

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Postby joelle » Apr 30th, '07, 21:55

you're the tommy to my chuckie
first verse is my fave
and wtf, you never send me songs anymore. I hate you.
Yes, we can.
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Postby C-Game » Apr 30th, '07, 22:12

James R. wrote:Thanks for the feedback everybody I appreciate it. And Bar, yeah I usually know what I need to work on, I just get bored with shit so I just stop workin on it lol. I usually do songs like this in about 40mins. This one took like 30. I hate doin drafts haha. But thanks again

And hadez, thanks a lot, I appreciate it.

Whenever anybody needs feed just lemme know and I'll break it down for you. Same wit battle votes, I might start gettin active in battling soon just to pass the time until I can get some money for recording shit.

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yea it wld be cool if u can vote on battles and start callin out

anyway a big tourney is about to start here on TR....

so u can join in it...
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Apr 30th, '07, 22:20

James R. wrote:Thanks for the feedback everybody I appreciate it. And Bar, yeah I usually know what I need to work on, I just get bored with shit so I just stop workin on it lol. I usually do songs like this in about 40mins. This one took like 30. I hate doin drafts haha. But thanks again

And hadez, thanks a lot, I appreciate it.

Whenever anybody needs feed just lemme know and I'll break it down for you. Same wit battle votes, I might start gettin active in battling soon just to pass the time until I can get some money for recording shit.

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yeh you should get into the battles, try take over the top members in the rankings :smoking:
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 30th, '07, 22:37

hot shit man, like i said you got some real talent.
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Postby Ka0t1c » May 1st, '07, 08:34

and there your have it folks, give it up for JAMES R!

that was a great message
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