So true

[shady_soul]

So true,
Happiness only leaves you with bad memories in future,
You try to reminisce good times you had with her /
But you find that emptiness and hollowness deep within you,
You try hard to push it thru

[James R.]

Not bad at all. I think the rhyming could be more complex and you could probably up your vocab a bit, but you had a decent arsenal of words in there. The main thing I didnt like was the rhyming with the same word(s) like 'to be' or smtn like that. But overall the song was good. The flow was a lil stretched in places but not too bad. Definitely enjoyed reading it.

[shady_soul]

i write a lot but honestly , i donno' what i write...those be jus' me feelings and some emotions/ do i write as a poem or for a song or jus' rhymes i donno' man! but ur feedbacks definitely inspires me to write.....damn! i gotta' try write a song then...i never really cared about my structure, i did care a lil' about rhyming but never gave a thought on the structure....imma' write soon/ thanks for the feedback james.