Life Verse

[Tash8]

I wrote this verse for a collab I was doing, but I had to redo it cause of a different beat we used.

Life is a simple word with complex meaning
it has its fun but at times your just left screaming
it's full of hardships, smiles and emotions
there's no way to block it, there's no life lotions.
flows by fast and there's no slow motion.
many gang fights and loads of commotion
times where you just can't fight, while teering an ocean.
there's no erasing time there's no clearing potion

So just hold on, cause there's no foldin'
the only way out is the way we goin'
we always changin', we always growin'
we always ragin', we always flowin'
Cause as time passes, we'll start reminiscin'
if you don't live well, you'll be missin'
let us sing while you guys listen
cuz the answer to heaven ain't an admission


Feed Please,
Tash8

[Hadez]

you had some multis at first, then they just went away. some of the rhymes i thought were sposed to be multis weren't cuz of off syllibols. other than that is was ok. keep it up.

[Tash8]

well what happeend was i started this, and then peole said i should keep it simple, so then the second verse i completely forgot about the multis.

[IceAxe]

the second half felt a bit weaker than the first to me... some parts were kinda simple [motion/co-motion, growin/flowin, not much difference in the words there],but less complexity would fit the mood of it. it was decent overall