verse im working on for a upcoming track(updated)

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Intro/Breakdown before beat fully kicks in (just spat faster)

wear your heart on your sleave motherfucker never leave motherfucker
got to heave motherfucker a make you greive motherfucker
running up motherfucker have you coming un-done motherfucker
funs over brother

Verse 1
i been running round the game like a headless chicken
i slit you so fast i grap the wound make the red-ness thicken
most these rappers like dogs with the ass-licken so im kicken
then spitten in there faces quicken with he paces
ya'll last places, grasp the races make them real to face this
you miss-the-hasteness when you diss-an-grace-this
or disgrace this a musta misplaced this or missed the line
you'll be pissed in time coz i ripped the nine your never ripping mine
there like a rubber line, im very flamable and a hand-the-fool a chance
to stand look kool, a follow the path that many failed before me
the trail below see, a go galore me, im this means war
uk im repping for i met the roar and i step in more
i joost smash the door, below and hold
ill never get a record sold just another record told
outlplayed on the same old beat maybe a mainstream ft
but ats the pain dream heat, sick lrics with the passion im hitting
like a birck coming through and smahing while spitting
i aint a cirminial but i got a criminal pressence
my punches come hitting you like a terminal present
call me cancer, your riding more dicks than a fucking lap dancer
pains the answer lyrical slaughter, ill have you fucked up, like my dick did your daughter

Updated


ive mixed in 2 brand new styles for me, creating a new style for myself, obviously it all cant be noticed coz my spitting/delivery is very different aswell, but please feed on the lyrics

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[IceAxe]

First off, the intro. Saying "motherfucker" 6 times rapid-fire is a plus in my book, so

I think this is some of the better stuff of your's I've read. There's some good multis in it...flowed real well also.

This looks like its shapin up to be a sick song.....

Keep workin on it man, good job

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First off, the intro. Saying "motherfucker" 6 times rapid-fire is a plus in my book, so

I think this is some of the better stuff of your's I've read. There's some good multis in it...flowed real well also.

This looks like its shapin up to be a sick song.....

Keep workin on it man, good job

thanx man, the motherfucker is just a filler to keep on flow coz im spitting faster weak technique but w/e lol

and thanx man it should be finished and audio in a week or so

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updated

[Tash8]

nice nice, your new updated lines were the best, the last line was a good punch

overall pretty sick, will sound hella good in audio, but i'm stillw ondering how u gonna say motherfucker that much in a row, i can only like do it three times and i start to slur.

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nice nice, your new updated lines were the best, the last line was a good punch

overall pretty sick, will sound hella good in audio, but i'm stillw ondering how u gonna say motherfucker that much in a row, i can only like do it three times and i start to slur.

lol i know is spit medium pace but i can talk fast as fuck, i just dislike it, i talked for sarah onc eon msn and went fast was funny as fuck lol

and thanx man

[C-Game]

pains the answer lyrical slaughter, ill have you fucked up, like my dick did your daughter

good punch dude.... and kool lyrics.. it flows smoothly

[Flamez]

those were some nice lyrics there bar loved the last line lol flows really well