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[beardhomestead]

No need to have this online anymore.

[Hadez]

um, k

4D posted two great tutorials in the Battle section that can very well help you out

[beardhomestead]

Keep at it....

wow, feedback that I can't tell if its negative or positive lol I think it's negative, though whatever lol, oh, and to that other guy (too lazy to do quote tags) I accually did take your advice, that article does seem helpful. Though my thing aint a battle so some shit didn't apply

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Keep at it....

wow, feedback that I can't tell if its negative or positive lol I think it's negative, though whatever lol, oh, and to that other guy (too lazy to do quote tags) I accually did take your advice, that article does seem helpful. Though my thing aint a battle so some shit didn't apply

What the fuck... i wrote somthing longer than that... must of not posted..

anyway.. i said (basicly)

Your structure is a little off, and by that i mean your lines arent leveled (balanced.. whatever). Your rhyme schemes are to simple, but your flow is on th right track. Vocabulary is decent, could be better... but ive heard (read) worse... Keep at it.. with enough motive you'll get better quick

did you by any chance, click reply, put your head down start typing then clicked submit real quick ?

if so, you just got done by the weird as fuck glicth, keeps happenign to me and fordie expeirenced it aswell, you type then the page refreshes and scrolls down to the bottom and your typing but it isnt coming up...its weird as fuck

[shady4life!]

hmmmm that was pretty good, yeah i agree with Mcmaybe ur rhymes r a lil too simple but ur on the right track. But so far i think this rap wud pass better as a diss than a real rap. It doesnt even hav a title. But its still okay. But it is lackin a lot of detail, i dont even know wat the hell ur talkin about without readin wat u wrote before the rap (or diss). If u want it to be a real rap then i advise u to make it a lil longer and explain more with detail y u hate the bitch and wat exactly did she do to u, with more complex rhymes and a smooth flow, oh yeah and also add a title.... until then i still dont think this thing is a real rap but just a personal diss for someone. But its still pretty good and i like it.

I remember when i wrote somethin like this for some bitch that i hated, man it had nice rhymes and disses in it and it was kinda funny and it was 3 pages long. But the thing about it is that i copied a few of rhymes and flows from other rappers and used them, but its not like she wud know But anyway it was still quite original and i think it was pretty good too