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A Small Piece

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A Small Piece

Postby Tash8 » Jun 17th, '07, 03:33

at weird times, I would ignore writing-rhymes
but as long as I stay in my writing-prime
I'd be igniting-lines as long as the lighting-shines
i'll find a sign to define whats on my mind
and combine some rhymes into wicked-lines
but at times, my sick-head-sighs, and I despise
these dick-head-guys, who become wise,
when I slip one verse, cause of writers-block
and suddenly all these fake ass writers-talk
cuz there lame ass lyrics hit tighter on the charts

A small piece i wrote in about 5-10 minutes. please feed.
Last edited by Tash8 on Jun 18th, '07, 03:12, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: A Small Piece

Postby Tash8 » Jun 18th, '07, 01:58

do i have to beg for some feed? :tounge2:
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Re: A Small Piece

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jun 18th, '07, 03:09

sorta out of place ending


writing-primes, i dont think primes can be used coz its plural it would have to be "in their writing primes"

other than that, sollid ryhmes through out, and nice flow and nothing seemed force other than what i mentioned

nice peice :y:
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Re: A Small Piece

Postby Tash8 » Jun 18th, '07, 03:11

thanks didn't notice, it shoulda been writing-prime

thanks ffor the feed.
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Re: A Small Piece

Postby Tash8 » Jun 18th, '07, 17:34

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