CYPHER - Puns, Metaphores & Similes (Read definitions) T

[4D]

This is a very important and most respected aspect of hip-hop wordplay, I posted the definitions of what they mean, so give them a look. Puns i do all the time, but, the other 2 are definitely something I have to try harder at, so should be tough for me too.

I put the different types in assorted colours, i`m gonna do the same in my rhyme, this would help others see what you`re doin.

pun (Definition)
A humorous play on words; "I do it for the pun of it"; "his constant punning irritated her" [syn: punning, wordplay, paronomasia] v : make a play on words; "Japanese like to pun--their language is well suited to punning"


[color=darkred]Simile (Definition)
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[4D]

"I thought this topic would fly and soar like an aeroplane
But, It`s sadder than when Proof lay dead like a hero Slayn"

Blue = Pun, Play on words, Cool, or, to Fly.

Red = Simile, havin 2 meanings, using the word "as" or "Like".

Green = Metaphor, having 2 meanings, not using "as" or "like".

COME ON POPLE, IT`S NOT THA?T HARD.

[4D]

Bump

[Tash8]

your a dick two inches deep in to my brain
cause your like a pencil sharpened to its vien

[4D]

My shit never stinks, you adore the odour, It's herbal 'n pure,
Every word is secure, you are cattle 'n spittin verbal manure.

My shit never stinks/= My lyrics are always great
You adore the odour/= You love my shit/lyrics
Cattle/= Cow, beef ready for slaughter
Shittin Verbal manure/= You're talkin bullshit (Cows/Bulls shit manure, lol)

[Tash8]

lined up on a roller coaster and it's a thrill thinking
that my lone words are glock sprays thru the hallways

roller coaster and it's a thrill - wordplay, roller coasters are supposed to be thrills..
lone words are glock sprays - metaphore, my words are like gunshots

hey 4d i'm not sure if these are metaphores or wordplay mind letting me know

[4D]

lined up on a roller coaster and it's a thrill thinking
that my lone words are glock sprays thru the hallways

roller coaster and it's a thrill - wordplay, roller coasters are supposed to be thrills..
lone words are glock sprays - metaphore, my words are like gunshots

hey 4d i'm not sure if these are metaphores or wordplay mind letting me know

Well, Comparing your rhymes to a roller coaster, would be a good metaphor, not wordplay, because you are using it to compare it with something else, without using the words "as" or "like". But, if you're just saying you're on a roller coaster and it's a thrill, and there's no other meaning, then it's not a metaphor, or anything else, it's just a statement.
Lone words are glock sprays is definitely a metaphor (not a simile, no "as" or "like"), you are comparing your words probably to something terrifying like the killer in that university closing in on you, not bad at all. Only thing I gotta say is don't lose track of your rhymes for the sake of metaphors. You could have replaced hallways with something rhyming with "thinking", or changed "thinking" to "as allways".
REally good effort man, and I encourage everybody else to try some of this shit, it's way fuckin harder than it looks, and props to anyone who tries.


My lyrics are sick as paedophiles shoppin for teddies in Smyths,
My illin be drillin ''n shredding ya scripts 'n you can lend me the bits,

Similie/= Self explanatory
Metaphor/= just comparing my words to the damage that electrical machinery could do.
(Pun) bits/= Bits for using in a drill, and I chopped you in bits, so you can lend me them.

[Tash8]

^ thanks 4d, i'm not forgeting my rhymes i'm just working at one thing at a time., i keep forgetting what's a wordplay, cause i thought playing with "roller coaster" as in "thrill rides"

my throats explodes like an explosion of bombs that i hold in my palms
and my ways of speaking are strays of diseasing disturbing the calm


*btw how's lend me the bits a metaphores.. is it like some complex one*

[4D]

^ thanks 4d, i'm not forgeting my rhymes i'm just working at one thing at a time., i keep forgetting what's a wordplay, cause i thought playing with "roller coaster" as in "thrill rides"

Yeah, no problem man, it's tough. See, it's weird, cos it's all wordplay, puns, metaphors and similies are all kinds of wordplay. So it's all wordplay, but puns would be more associated to wordplay.

*btw how's lend me the bits a metaphores.. is it like some complex one*

Kinda, but not that complex. The little drill things on the end of a drill are called "bits", and I chopped the guy in bits, so that's probably actually a pun more than anything. But, the whole line is comparing my rhymes to a drill, which is a metaphor. Don't worry man, you're not alone. This shit can confuse me too. I`m gonna change the colours on my last rhyme. P.s btw nice job on your last one, well done.


Next rhyme:
My verses are purses and nurses, They hold value and make people feel better,
I`m not physically tough, but my lyrical stuff is Iron complete with steel letters.

Both are metaphors, don't think they need much explaining

[Tash8]

i emotionally fear me exploding in mere, creating an ocean of tears
each day is a new cycle like emotions goin' thru a vaporization clear



emotionally fear me exploding in mere, creating an ocean of tears -- i fear exploding in crys creating an ocean of tears

like emotions goin' thru a vaporization clear - each day new emotions occur forgetting the rest like the vaporate [conclusion of the above metaphore]

btw we need more people doing this, cause this is real important, its not just about multis and shit

[J Roc]

my metaphores are all-tight,they sqeeze together quite alright
an my multies are as dope as drugs,they get passed along by comman thugs





"my metaphores are all-tight,they sqeeze together quite alright"

^^i think thats wordplay "tight" is used 2 different ways

"an my multies are as dope as drugs"

^^camparin multies to drugs,my mulies are good

"they get passed along by comman thugs"

^^thugs pass along both drugs and my multies,my multies pwn



bad structure,did i do it right?

[Tash8]

^ nice wordplay and metaphore, but i dont think they were a pun

my complex lyrics are like a sandwich it takes you a while to digest it
then i hit you with so manys you shit in public, and from there arrested

lol proly my worst so far, but i'm getting tired, need a brake

[J Roc]

thanks,yea i dunno what a pun is

um...

my rhymes are still tightening,and even more flashy than lightning
call me a viking cuz i sail open seas,sittin down cuz i got broken knees



um,i think thats right

"my rhymes are still tightening"

^^from my last bar,my rhymes are getting better

[Rain Matrix]

I hit u blunt, like a royal wrap, I foil acts, like spirals my rhymes coil back
theres no struggle, u need air so struggle, I'm like can food try 2 spoil that

[Tash8]

my pain is a shattered mirror but clearer than sane in my interior
slain in a flatter inferior like an ant's size to the world's superior

my pain is a shattered mirror - my pain is having a fucked up image
learer than sane in my interior - i'm fine insideo f me
slain in a flatter inferior - i'm harrased cuz of my image