haha

[Enimee]

look you got my attention now im tempted, teachin you a lesson in sexin by how i bend this
u couldnt forge a metal strong enough to contain this kettle, boil over and its all over give me a medal
your weak flow has me buggin like where he steal dat from, listenin to all my old cd's that i aint feelin on
you remind me of some otha dude i knew back when, a busta cracka spittin shit jus to afford his habit its
jus so predictable that u wuld write me back again, fuckin fan u know what your really lackin stan
u lackin touch actin tinaktin the stuff that makes you spin the script backwards and
make the croud flip upside down of what u been rappin at them then
have a girl hit u up afta the show speakin words like "baby you gotta be tha masta of flow"
i gotta keep it simple so u can rap your minds around it, pop ur "golden thesis" like a pimple so u finaly know your surroundin
gimme a track so i can jus run around it and, gimme some konjac so i can down it
im the best there aint no doubt about it, jus ask joey and he'll tell you why this clown is frownin
so here i go again automatically smackin, all these ho's who be jackin frontin like it was them rappin

[4D]

No multies, flow sucks, structure is dysfunctional, concept is lame. Keep at it you've got no potential, but keep at it, yer good for a laugh!

[Enimee]

lol im rusty and your blind...

[4D]

Nah man, when it comes to rhyme analysis my retinas got laser sharp 20/20 vision.

And the vision sucked like a Dyson.

[James R.]

Ima keep it real wit you. I just dont seem to get your rhyme scheme. Like you have lines that just randomly end and have no internal rhymes or rhymes elsewhere and the rhyming in a few lines was pretty weak.

your weak flow has me buggin like where he steal dat from, listenin to all my old cd's that i aint feelin on

nothing before, after, or in that line made a rhyme and that's just not good writing

and back again rhyming with lacking stan is weak in text. That MIGHT be able to slide in audio, but even then that's a stretch. You need to tighten up your rhymes and up the vocab cuz that metal kettle medal line was smtn 50 would spit and you never wanna be on that level.

[James R.]

Ima keep it real wit you. I just dont seem to get your rhyme scheme. Like you have lines that just randomly end and have no internal rhymes or rhymes elsewhere and the rhyming in a few lines was pretty weak.

your weak flow has me buggin like where he steal dat from, listenin to all my old cd's that i aint feelin on

nothing before, after, or in that line made a rhyme and that's just not good writing

and back again rhyming with lacking stan is weak in text. That MIGHT be able to slide in audio, but even then that's a stretch. You need to tighten up your rhymes and up the vocab cuz that metal kettle medal line was smtn 50 would spit and you never wanna be on that level.

[Tash8]

Nah man, when it comes to rhyme analysis my retinas got laser sharp 20/20 vision.

And the vision sucked like a Dyson.

nice simile

enimee ur too cocky.

[4D]

James I know it was an accident, but it's so appropriate to post that message twice. You said it well.

And Thanks Tash, lol. That one shitty simile was doper than his whole verse, lmao.

[Enimee]

wow read it again dude...u dont understand real rhyme...rhyme isnt jus wors that have similar sounds or that end in the same way...like gay and pray...or stay away...or last pass...gas fast...trash ass
smash amass

ash and ass dont rhyme...technically
but they do if u listen right...lol pay attention

Ima keep it real wit you. I just dont seem to get your rhyme scheme. Like you have lines that just randomly end and have no internal rhymes or rhymes elsewhere and the rhyming in a few lines was pretty weak.

your weak flow has me buggin like where he steal dat from, listenin to all my old cd's that i aint feelin on

nothing before, after, or in that line made a rhyme and that's just not good writing

and back again rhyming with lacking stan is weak in text. That MIGHT be able to slide in audio, but even then that's a stretch. You need to tighten up your rhymes and up the vocab cuz that metal kettle medal line was smtn 50 would spit and you never wanna be on that level.

lol from and on do rhyme if u say it right sigh some things cant be captured by text im still on my battle mode i gotta switch ova to text gimme a lil bit k