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Practice This

Postby Enimee » Jul 6th, '07, 04:10

That ass tash you sure was wastin your time when u decided to write-me-a-diss
u cudnt beat me with punches lyrical or real so why you gonna try to fight-me-with-this

7 lines that shit was barely-worth-considerin, you thinkin you good enough to beat me thats the most belittlin

cause first off all your rhymes were wack and u lie in all your lines too cause you aint shootin
like a dick with the condom rapped too tight so stop what your fuckin sayin stupid

my shits most incriminatin cause i dumb it down alot you aint worth-my-talent
im insane and plain the only guy in the world who can fuckin swerve-with-balance

shit u think cause my rhymes are tactless that they cant be? yall are just reinactments
when actually the fact is that im just bored tired of beating these dudes strate to fragments

so heres a personal for you

tash rhymes with fast which is what i am after crank but what sucks is the crash cash is what i keep in tha bank but back to tash is it tash with a long a cause in that case this guy is beyond gay

your prolly stuck up and bitchy rich like richy but either way u can still keep my white and sticky
ur filthy and flippy im flamboyant and brilliant not a milimeter of talent i will it or shall it instillin some power

no multis? fuck that dont need them anyways i right like i say dont like well then hey ill let the semi spray
furocious ima beast u know this well atleast you dont show it but lets see

if any of yall could beat me legi ti mately

haha see me an in an anonymous battle you cock suckin faggots
ill snipe u like halo while you jus claim u was laggin <wow that was random>

bar tried and cudnt even see me in an anonymous battle...lol i aint bitchin...fuckit yeah i am
im fuckin cocky as hell yeah i know its true but fuck atleast i see who i am yall blind mother fuckers cant even see why i am

the way....u know the rest
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Re: Practice This

Postby IceAxe » Jul 6th, '07, 04:51

haha see me an in an anonymous battle you cock suckin faggots


yeah... keep tellin yourself that...

anyway... there's some multis in it that are decent




structure was good up until about half way through
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Re: Practice This

Postby Tash8 » Jul 6th, '07, 04:55

:n:

that almost didn't suck.. :unsure:

ice, tash rhymes with fast, i guess he was trying to say i'm cool
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Re: Practice This

Postby James R. » Jul 6th, '07, 19:37

tash rhymes with fast which is what i am after crank but what sucks is the crash cash is what i keep in tha bank but back to tash is it tash with a long a cause in that case this guy is beyond gay

what the fuck are you talkin about?

It was decent until that point and then your structure went straight to hell and the mutlies went right along with it. Shorten up the lines or use something to show me what you're rhyming with. It's harder to find your rhymes in text than it is to hear it in audio.
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Re: Practice This

Postby Enimee » Jul 7th, '07, 03:40

lol ite
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