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Postby Tash8 » Jul 6th, '07, 00:43

wrote in thsi in like 4 min, cuz i was pissed. not to many similes and not many metas either.. not to many multis but i was just practicing personals
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Re: Enemy

Postby IceAxe » Jul 6th, '07, 00:52

you writin this was a waste of time, imo

personals seemed on point... the Kojack reference I could've done with out.

the multis that were there were decent.... flow was ok

Ok work I guess
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Re: Enemy

Postby Tash8 » Jul 6th, '07, 00:56

IceAxe wrote:you writin this was a waste of time, imo

personals seemed on point... the Kojack reference I could've done with out.

the multis that were there were decent.... flow was ok

Ok work I guess


why was it a waste?

thx for feed
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Re: Enemy

Postby IceAxe » Jul 6th, '07, 00:59

cuz there's no point in gettin riled up at someone over the internet, and spending time to write a 7 line piece about them.
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Re: Enemy

Postby Tash8 » Jul 6th, '07, 01:00

IceAxe wrote:cuz there's no point in gettin riled up at someone over the internet, and spending time to write a 7 line piece about them.


but it's good for practice...
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Re: Enemy

Postby James R. » Jul 6th, '07, 19:32

The personals were decent but everything else was lacking. This was pretty weak for you Tash. The emotion was decent, I could definitely tell you were pissed, but I gotta say I've seen a lot better from you and expected better from you. The flow was off, the multies were basic, and the kojack reference was like an after thought. As for the personals, like I said, they were decent, but personals are all about delivery and it wasn't there.
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Re: Enemy

Postby Tash8 » Jul 6th, '07, 19:34

^ gotta agree with you, it was pretty wack.. i guess i was too pissed to write at the time haha
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Re: Enemy

Postby J Roc » Jul 7th, '07, 09:48

i cant see it :unsure:
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