Lost In My Own Mind

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Chorus
lost in my own mind, i can see but its all blind
no begining or end, lost in time
lost in my own mind, see i try to go forward but i end up behind
lost in my own mind

verse1
see what im saying is the decision im taking
is persitintly making me constantly breaking me
the time it is aching see im trying just shaking free
see im pacing behind just chasin they-ryhme
gracing they-climb, relaxed, like im strolling through time
just rolling to the prime now im scoring of they lines
as the target reminds i aint were i wanne be
you cant blame me, coz i aint gonni see
another motherfucking failure in the face
i aint got no fucking valour in my pace
growing up with a working class hero classed disgrace
i been confused from the start but now im losing my art
so im choosing to start again the rest is history
now try test this with me the beat i bless this ya see
confused as fuck, so i refuse to duck
and re-use my luck thats ran out
i dunno wereabouts


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thats all i got for this on the PC so decided to post it up, uhm i know it says Verse 1 but idk if this will be the first verse coz there a different approach i wanne start the track in

anywae, feed please

[Tash8]

pretty good

nice multis, and can't wiat to see it on audio

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pretty good

nice multis, and can't wiat to see it on audio

thanx man

im tryna practicing riding the beat with this track, so hopeuflly itll come off good

[IceAxe]

the flow in the chorus was kinda shakey for me, but t might sound better when I hear it over a beat... but other than that it was all some good stuff...nice multis, the verse had a good flow

good work lookin forward to the audio

[James R.]

Very poetic feel to it. I enjoyed the read. the multies were good and you even worked it out with 3 line rhymes and even a one line rhyme coupled with some internals, very nice. Can't wait to see the rest.

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the flow in the chorus was kinda shakey for me, but t might sound better when I hear it over a beat... but other than that it was all some good stuff...nice multis, the verse had a good flow

good work lookin forward to the audio

thanx man, yeh the chorus is structured weird on the text, it should flow ok though lol

Very poetic feel to it. I enjoyed the read. the multies were good and you even worked it out with 3 line rhymes and even a one line rhyme coupled with some internals, very nice. Can't wait to see the rest.

thanks man