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i regret writing this lol

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i regret writing this lol

Postby stevethetruth » Jul 13th, '07, 16:33

just seeing you smile makes it all worthwhile
thoughts of you just pile i'll treat you better than ----
but i promise i'll never change till i deprive
going crazy thoughts hazy while i stare in your eyes
and i just love the fact i can make you laugh
for no reason such a great smile and i mean that
i love the fact you stay positive no matter the case
an amazing personality somthing i'd embrace
never hate nothing i'd tempt to take advanage of
i'm here struggling to be a man but it's tough
bugging if i should tell you or crumble up and hide
kill my pride let it ride and allow it to slide
Spiritually inclined I feel like hitting rewind
sometimes but I can't because you got me blind
http://www.myspace.com/stevethetruth <-- my myspace add me!!
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Re: i regret writing this lol

Postby Tash8 » Jul 13th, '07, 17:56

ahhh, i hate feeding these, dunno if i told you but I hate when people write these lol

anyways, real real nice flow :) <-- which you taught me if you remember, rhymes are pretty good, vocab was decent, you stayed on topic throughout :y:

pretty damn good, keeep it up
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