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I leave the papers nerves in bits (Practice: metaphors/simil

Postby 4D » Jul 17th, '07, 09:56

I`m very intereested in the world of serial killers, and wanted to write a rhyme using all their names and mention some of the things they've done, and try to use the serial killer as a metaphor for my lyric skills. This is an attempt at that. I hope to add a few more names to the rhyme yet, so it's not finished yet.




I`m the rhymin' "Son Of Sam", Biro the gun in hand, and every sacred verse is sick,
I leave the papers nerves in bits, I`m 44 calibre's iller than David Berk-o-witz
A dangerous journalist who hurls 'n spits words 'n skits, and no rap is sicker,
Every dissin coward who spits a vowel gets disemboweled by Jack The Ripper,
Im draftin scriptures as sick as graphic pictures taken at Ed Gein's place,
I`m rippin' pussies with Ted B's pace when I parade a text these days,
On vexed beef days I eat scribbled words like little girls on a platter dish,
I`m no battered fish, I make faggits run out the closet like Albert Fish,
No catchers mitt could capture this chapterists rhyme or even touch it,
When my grammar rhymes on evil subjacts it's hammer time like Peter Sutcliffe
The Yorkshire Ripper, I torture scriptures and romp stomper with the Nazi's,
More Lobster in my panties than Pedro ALonso, the "Monster Of The Andes",
He plundered three hundred teens asunder, mass murder with no max limits,
Like Pedro I prolifically pulverise puny pussies, but with pro rap lyrics.
I don't have critics, 'cos I`m untouchable like Al Capone and Mc Hammer,
To oppose my deadly grammar's to stagger home with Jeffrey Dahmer,
I don't envy glamour, or wealthy scammers dwellin in Large Mansions,
'Cos i got addicted fans to inact the sickest plans since Charles Mansons,
I don't charge ransoms, I abduct minds for fun 'n scan the shady scoreboards
In battles I produce more bodies than John Wayne Gacy's floorboards.



Thanks for reading, any feedback is much appreciated!! :y:



EDit:

People mentioned so far:
David Berkowitz (Son Of SAm/ .44 Calibre Killer)
Jack The Ripper (Disembowelled his victims with surgical precision)
Ed Gein (When police entered his house of horrors they found seat upholstered in human skin, nipple belts, lamphades made of skin, skinned womans breasts with a strap added so he could wear it. Not to mention loads of other sick shit!)
Ted Bundy (Had a ferocious appetite to kill women, and he used to mutilate the genitals, etc)
Albert Fish (Jumped out a wardrobe to capture, cook and eat a little girl)
Peter Sutcliffe (The Yorkshire Ripper, murdered prostitutes, mostly using a hammer)
Pedro Alonso (Monster Of The Andes, most prolific serial killer ever, killed 300+, lobster was a play on crabs)
Jeffrey Dahmer (Used to take Gays home, beat them to death, screw them and eat them)
Charles Manson (Had an occult and brainwashed some women to kill some celebrities)
John Wayne Gacy (Murdered 54 kids, and buried them under his house)


Some other explanations:
No battered fish: No cod, In Ireland a cod is a fish, but also a slang word for a "joke". I`m no joke.
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Re: I leave the papers nerves in bits (Practice: metaphors/simil

Postby Tash8 » Jul 17th, '07, 17:44

:worship: :worship:

that showed a lot of skills right there man, wow real real real nice..
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Postby Rain Matrix » Jul 17th, '07, 21:53

it's awesome it's like history class 4 serial killers except in a methodical creative writing piece
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Postby IceAxe » Jul 17th, '07, 22:08

I like the concept. Tight rhymes as always....nice flow.

Good work :y:
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Re: I leave the papers nerves in bits (Practice: metaphors/simil

Postby 4D » Jul 17th, '07, 23:19

haha thanks people, great to get the feedback. I recommend people to check out these sickos on youtube or wikipedia, very interesting if you're into the darker side of human behaviour.
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Postby James R. » Jul 18th, '07, 03:22

You just tapped into my Court TV side lol. Nice piece man, always good to read your stuff. Hot concept too.
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Postby C-Game » Jul 18th, '07, 18:22

whoa sick :y:

damn our conversations getin in to ur head man...

lol
today i watched da manson biography
he didnt kill a single person ...

oh and u got da stats wrong on gacy
its 35
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Postby Flamez » Jul 18th, '07, 18:24

tight man

nice job :8)
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Re: I leave the papers nerves in bits (Practice: metaphors/simil

Postby 4D » Jul 25th, '07, 13:30

C-Game wrote:whoa sick :y:

damn our conversations getin in to ur head man...

lol
today i watched da manson biography
he didnt kill a single person ...

oh and u got da stats wrong on gacy
its 35


Nah, it's 33, but yeah got it wrong. I`m nearly sure it read in my book that he killed 54, maybe they were just estimating how many. I could have just been getting mixed up with Chikatilo who I was tellin ya about, who killed 53.

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