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Postby James R. » Jul 22nd, '07, 21:51

Every time I listen to the radio I fuckin hear MIMS, Jeezy, Lil Wayne. I'm sick of it and I just need to let it out, hence all my shit lately being about the epidemic of shitty thug rappers. JUST CUZ YOU SELL CRACK DOESN'T MEAN YOU CAN RAP. And on the other end, just because you rap doesn't mean you could've/would've/should've or know anything about how to sell crack.

Let me just say it now, stop talking what you don’t know
Cuz real thugs got the block poppin but they don’t flow
Yeah you might have sold a bag enough with the holdin mags
Blowin tags, throwin flags, you was watchin oprah fag
And normally I wouldn’t be comin at the game
But when MIMS sells a mil you know somethin’s got to change
If hip-hop is shit drops then damn the game’s flaming up
But 6 glocks and clip talk is old so I’ma change it up
Every time I get a mic I leave another speaker broken
And when I run out of ink I fill my pen with hemoglobin
I’m like the rap Aristotle; philosophical mind
You can catch me on any day killin topical rhymes
May sound a little weird, still its logical thought
But I feel as though I’m the realest author since pac
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby joelle » Jul 22nd, '07, 22:09

fucking awesome
wow it's weird typing with fake nails
you rock jam
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby Tash8 » Jul 22nd, '07, 22:16

i liked the concept, cause i hate mims and all these other gay fucking rappers

but it's not my fav from you for this reason

becasue the first half you were talkin about shitty rappers then the second half u were talking about urself

still better than a lot of people but not up to ur standards
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby J Roc » Jul 23rd, '07, 00:39

James R. wrote:Yeah you might have sold a bag enough with the holdin mags
Blowin tags, throwin flags, you was watchin oprah fag


that last part made me laff,

prolly tha first peice that was short enuff for me 2 read from u,didnt look like it had n e weak points so i cant really say how 2 improve it,nice job wit it James
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby D@vid » Jul 23rd, '07, 00:40

flow was amazing....id say work on it and make it into a song :y:


oprah fag :laughing:
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby IceAxe » Jul 23rd, '07, 00:44

I like the concept... flows nice, as are the lyrics. But like Tash said, you kinda flipped to talkin about yourself halfway through, it would've been better if you stayed with the original point.

Good work :y:
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby joelle » Jul 23rd, '07, 01:12

I don't think it went off-topic. Maybe the title was a little misleading, but you're talking about annoying rappers, and then saying how you're not annoying. I dunno, imo it worked.
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby Tash8 » Jul 23rd, '07, 01:14

joelle wrote:I don't think it went off-topic. Maybe the title was a little misleading, but you're talking about annoying rappers, and then saying how you're not annoying. I dunno, imo it worked.


umm ok
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby joelle » Jul 23rd, '07, 01:16

...?
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby Tash8 » Jul 23rd, '07, 01:17

in writing/rapping you can't just go from saying fake thugs are fucking stupid to saying i leave speakers broken, there needs to be a transition, usually i would say to others yea whatever, but he got amazing skills and it's usually good to point it out cuz he knows how to fix it.
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby joelle » Jul 23rd, '07, 01:19

If hip-hop is shit drops then damn the game’s flaming up
But 6 glocks and clip talk is old so I’ma change it up
Every time I get a mic I leave another speaker broken

the underlined section..that's a transition, isn't it?
I'm not trying to start an argument or anything. And yeah maybe the transition could have been smoother or whatever. But it was pretty much a freestyle, and I think it works just the way it is.
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby Tash8 » Jul 23rd, '07, 01:21

oh fuck ur right i didn't even notice that

thanks for clearing up haha

sorry
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby CaptivatingVokalz » Jul 23rd, '07, 02:49

this naturally flowed into my mind... two thumbs up :y: :y: looking forward to reading more from you
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby James R. » Jul 23rd, '07, 03:33

Yeah this was pretty much a freestyle and I switched it up because I couldn't think of anything else that annoyed me off the top of my head lol. And thanks D@vid I never seen you reply to smtn in here. I probably will turn it into a song.
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Re: Diss to fake thug rappers

Postby D@vid » Jul 23rd, '07, 04:30

James R. wrote:Yeah this was pretty much a freestyle and I switched it up because I couldn't think of anything else that annoyed me off the top of my head lol. And thanks D@vid I never seen you reply to smtn in here. I probably will turn it into a song.



i usually only come in this section if im bored and feel like reading. ive read ur shit b4, and its almost always good imo :y:
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