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Re: havent droped anything in here for ages.

Postby Tash8 » Jul 22nd, '07, 22:30

not bad, nice vocab, rhymes were decentt.. flow was good, you stayed on topic which is good.. umm dunno what else to say but it's not bad
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Postby James R. » Jul 23rd, '07, 03:39

Nice vocab, decent flow, nice concepts. Keep it up man. Not much wrong so not much to improve. All I can say would be to maybe fix up the flow because it was a little choppy in spots. Keep it up bro.
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Postby Flamez » Jul 23rd, '07, 04:47

pretty good killa, i liked it
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