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dissin hoodrich[spittin on everybody]

Postby J Roc » Jul 23rd, '07, 01:13

aite on anotha site my crews beefin wit hoodrich all stars which is packed wit vets,so before i drop a cypher ill let yall see wat i do,its loaded wit peronals,punches,nameplay,multies,metaphores an similes,rite now they aint battlin no more but still sayin they tha best so...

how tha hell yall gonna STAY-RETIRED wen u MAYBE-FIRED?an hood?all of yall BE-IN-CARS,ill beat hoodrich till they SEEIN-STARS,you'll find them hangin out an LESBIEN-BARS,Hoodrich can BE-LIARS-ITS-KNOWN,but why yall gotta be chillin ina RETIREMENT-HOME?we all kno whos comin OUT-ON-TOP,cuz hoodrich yur gonna be MOUTH-TO-GLOCK cuz we aint ABOUT-TO-STOP,yea thats rite were spittin on EVERYONE,yall claimin hood but you NEVER-SEE-GUNS,i dont wana hear any of yall LIPPIN-MOUTH,cuz we challenged you an you CHICKENED-OUT,how yall claimin yur tight wit THIRTEEN-MEMBERS?dang tha whole crew are peple INBETWEEN-GENDERS!!haha sayin yall in tha hood but YOU-IN-THA-BACK-THO,tha only time you spit is wen yur CHEWIN TOBACCO!!

"ill beat hoodrich till they seein-stars" they called hoodrich all stars,think bout it
"cuz we challenged you an you CHICKENED OUT"wanted 2 point out that thats a personal
"tha only time you spit is wen u got CHEWIN TOBACCO" they dont rap very much n e more

ima bout 2 add a bit more,so wat yall think?
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Re: dissin hoodrich[spittin on everybody]

Postby Tash8 » Jul 23rd, '07, 01:16

it's not bad man, ur multis are starting to make sense now :)

EVERYONE,claimin hood but you NEVER-SEE-GUNS

that's not good right there cuz it's mismatch syllable and doesn't flow, if it doesnt' sound right htne don't use it

but keep at it, ur improving real fast
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Re: dissin hoodrich[spittin on everybody]

Postby J Roc » Jul 23rd, '07, 01:24

Tash8 wrote:it's not bad man, ur multis are starting to make sense now :)

EVERYONE,claimin hood but you NEVER-SEE-GUNS

that's not good right there cuz it's mismatch syllable and doesn't flow, if it doesnt' sound right htne don't use it

but keep at it, ur improving real fast


thanks 4 feedin tash,ill try 2 fix it a bit

by tha way,if n e of yall thinkin im sayin [spit] 2 much,thats tha name of our crew [spit inc]
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Re: dissin hoodrich[spittin on everybody]

Postby Rain Matrix » Jul 23rd, '07, 02:29

I liked tha chewing tobbacco line
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Re: dissin hoodrich[spittin on everybody]

Postby CaptivatingVokalz » Jul 23rd, '07, 02:44

Your gonna be MOUTH-TO-GLOCK haha loving it. nice diss oohh i got an idea for "hoodrich".... how about "hoodbitch" lol
*~Vokally Blessed Kristen~*
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Re: dissin hoodrich[spittin on everybody]

Postby James R. » Jul 23rd, '07, 03:42

Everyone and Never see guns does rhyme if you annunciate every syllable but no one does that so just change the punch. But overall it's not bad. If the vets are good good then you might have some problems, but it's not something they would ignore.
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Re: dissin hoodrich[spittin on everybody]

Postby Flamez » Jul 23rd, '07, 04:30

haha that was a nice diss man
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Re: dissin hoodrich[spittin on everybody]

Postby C-Game » Jul 23rd, '07, 12:48

nice stuff J

actually tash u can rhyme everyone and neversee-guns
syllables mach if u drag everyone as in ever-ry-one and never-see-guns
4 syllables in both cases

anyway good job J
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Re: dissin hoodrich[spittin on everybody]

Postby J Roc » Jul 23rd, '07, 17:14

aite aite,thanks for feedin everyone

i finished it an endin up sayin

yea thats rite were spittin on EVERYONE,yall claimin hood but you NEVER-SEEN-ONE

yea.... :smoking:
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Re: dissin hoodrich[spittin on everybody]

Postby Tash8 » Jul 23rd, '07, 19:25

C-Game wrote:nice stuff J

actually tash u can rhyme everyone and neversee-guns
syllables mach if u drag everyone as in ever-ry-one and never-see-guns
4 syllables in both cases

anyway good job J


i didn't say it doesn't, i just said it's not good
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