The Meaning Is The Essence

[Tash8]

the sight of weeping expressions, the meaning's 'essence'
evidence how 'foul' life can mess with
and it's impressive if one gets defensive
problems erupt like 'lava' cause these bitches sensitive
start 'beef' to start 'grilling' each other
start killin' and smotherin', 'squashin' your brothers
turn them in to 'vegetables'
why is the sight of weeping expressions
caused because your feeling oppression
body's lie on the ground with the tearful shedding

ehh, i wrote this in 10 min but i didn't really like it

[Tash8]

[James R.]

Not bad. Vocab was pretty good. Flow was iffy, but it worked enough to read it. Really lookin forward to that new piece you're workin on man.

[Tash8]

Not bad. Vocab was pretty good. Flow was iffy, but it worked enough to read it. Really lookin forward to that new piece you're workin on man.

thanks, i honestly didn't liket his one cause like you said the flow was messed up. i didn't like the style either

[Flamez]

it was aight just the flow was a lil messed up..

[CaptivatingVokalz]

Explain what meaning is the Essence? I read this over a few times and couldn't quite grip the meaning? This piece has the aptitude to be quite compelling. I perceived it to be about how peoples inability to deal and cope with their surroundings dig up their own holes even deeper than they should... hence being "defensive" and "sensitive"... when one appears to be quite defensive...their usually really sensitive... sorry to blab lol but anyway on with my opinion...

"the sight of weeping expressions, the meaning's 'essence'
evidence how 'foul' life can mess with
and it's impressive if one gets defensive
problems erupt like 'lava' cause these bitches sensitive"

I loved the introduction...it has a solid foundation to become striking. I think you should go from there and work on this a little more and I bet it will be well-expressed...

[Tash8]

haha nah i'm working on a new piece at the moment and id ont think this is even worth redoing haha

thanks for feed