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Freestyle to the Thugz Mansion beat

Postby James R. » Jul 24th, '07, 20:21

These lyrics allow me to take myself away from the pain
Away from the game, more or less they’re keeping me sane
But deep in my brain there’s still a little piece of me missin
It was easily taken just as it was easily given
After much deliberation and a little soul searchin
I finally got the answers when I found this old merchant
He had a cart of things that no one would want to buy
Until I saw a necklace that literally caught my eye
I couldn’t look past it to see problems behind it
My God turned from a myth to the man who designed it
The merchant looked at me and laughed as I stared star struck
The diamonds that you’re seeing are from tears r us
He poured a bottle of liquor and half of another
And said, that my friend is for your African brothers
I gasped and I stuttered, my mind crashed and I muttered
How can they be my brothers with no natural mother?
I know they go through shit but we goin through it too
Red and blue gangs formed, don’t know what to do
If you care to see it gramps I can show it to you
He said you’re a child you don’t know these rules
The young men you see robbin people in the dark
Is nothing compared to Darfur and the people losin parts
Of their body for jewels that we put in your chains
At the price of limbs and people using cocaine
You see it’s all a cycle no matter how you’re lookin at it
Maybe you’re sellin crack or maybe you’re the addict
You do wrong to get right but do worse on the way
Take your ass to church and learn the bible verse of the day
And it’s hurtin to say but your attitude is quite ironic
Buyin diamonds, funding war, but don’t care because you want it
But look at the victims, ebony skin like yours
Nothing but innocent bodies hittin the floor
He made me stop, I could finally see past the jewels
He gave me an answer because I asked the truth
He removed the blinding light that masked the youth
And preached something real like the pastors do
Diamonds are blinding, but I don’t think I’ll ever be on this
Shinin nonsense buyin stones despite the conflict
Spread my wings and fly away, black dove into the sun
Compton to Darfur you’re my brother, we’re as one
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Re: Freestyle to the Thugz Mansion beat

Postby joelle » Jul 24th, '07, 20:25

I think this is my favorite ever.
You rock Jam.
Yes, we can.
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Re: Freestyle to the Thugz Mansion beat

Postby Flamez » Jul 24th, '07, 23:47

i definitely enjoyed reading this one James, good job i liked it a lot :8)
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Re: Freestyle to the Thugz Mansion beat

Postby Tash8 » Jul 25th, '07, 00:00

damn dunno how you maange to write lile 32 lines and keep it good for that long

man that was hot keep at it.
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Re: Freestyle to the Thugz Mansion beat

Postby James R. » Jul 25th, '07, 03:30

Glad you're all enjoying it. Thanks for the replies.
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Re: Freestyle to the Thugz Mansion beat

Postby CaptivatingVokalz » Jul 25th, '07, 10:04

That was quite heavy. Every line was upright. You told a story and you told it damn good. The kind of story that makes you think at the end of it like "damn..." thinking twice before indulging in things that involve losing something of a great value while gaining something of a lesser value. Your ethical conscience shined in this. Very meaningful and real :y: :y:
*~Vokally Blessed Kristen~*
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Re: Freestyle to the Thugz Mansion beat

Postby James R. » Jul 26th, '07, 05:41

Thanks for the feed Vokalz
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Re: Freestyle to the Thugz Mansion beat

Postby 4D » Jul 27th, '07, 18:55

:worship: Amazing as per usual. You got a grerat head for a conscious rap.
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